forget to unremember.

lost love

Crimson. Warm. Fluid. Like blood, you swarmed through my crooked veins. You pumped inside of me like a melodious harmony, thrusting life into me. I remember days of endless sunsets & the musk of twilight tantalizing my nostrils.

Bursting. Throbbing. Jutting. Like a bloody rose, you sprung up through my beating heart. I can still feel being cracked wide open with laughter & standing over the brooding storm clouds.

Tender. Soft. Fleshy. Like a twittering sparrow, you shivered through me. You plagiarized the melody in my soul & waltzed through my ears like a beautiful sonata. I can still hear its echoes haunt my musings in the nighttime.

Cold. Frozen. Forgotten. Like a dream hours after one has awakened. I set free the longing to soar into the sunrise. I will remember no more the beautiful nightmare that haunts my melancholy mind. But like a phantom dancing in the sunbeams, I forget to unremember my hearts very beating.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

I kinda like the imagery of your "Crooked Veins" & "Endless Sunsets". I read it with fluent especially the first few lines.. what a beautiful heaven you've created around your page! Sometimes, the love's just meant to be lost but not in a way to hurt the heart. The heart gets hurt itself, for having..., not to have what it wished to have for. Nice imagery!

[thundershine]

Thank you! Yes, when a writer's heart is broken...it bleeds words :)

[Adam Adams]

And.. you've bled... well.
Some kinda of variable sensations of love I do find in your stuffs which's seemed quite intriguing to be read. Btw, your choice over titles's very good. Liked it!

[Lord of the Kings]

great scenic poem. those words make every emotion feel more real. Although there is one thing I want to ask if you have to tell about whom this poem is about in word, what would it be?

[thundershine]

It's about the one my soul loves.

[Lord of the Kings]

hmm explains why it feels so real

[hanselwheresgretel?]

You really bring the reader through a ride line after line. Your choice of words leaves some meanings questionable though.

[thundershine]

It's up to the reader's interpretation :)

[hanselwheresgretel?]

Not a bad thing, I like the mystery :) looking forward to read more!

[James Alice]

You had me at "endless sunsets and the musk of twilight." Like tapping a vein of some long lost summer time memory that's always lost JUST under the conscious surface.

I think maybe you like music, too. Iono, could be wrong. ^_^

[thundershine]

hehehe, yes, I am a singer and I write lyrics :)

[James Alice]

Hopefully as well as you write poetry!

[thundershine]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-mV5hJeUt2o

Let's hope! :p

[vido.]

Pieces like yours are what drew me into writers cafe. Lucid yet intricate wording and thought provoking. x

[thundershine]

Thank you, I appreciate it!

[Bare trees]

You've been able to integrate your feelings of sex, love and loss in a way that reminds me of a dream itself. Each beginning phrase of a new paragraph begins with something that could emanate from the subconscious. Lines like "You plagiarized the melody in my soul or But like a phantom dancing in the sunbeams, I forget to unremember my hearts very beating," are beautifully written. Nice picture too.

[thundershine]

Thank you very much! :D