World in order

As a baby

All you do is cry.

and a mother,

takes it in pride.

born into love

lust from desire,

kindles the fire ,

but could never

be extinguish.

Dear Father is drunk,

beloved mother has left.

baby boy took his first step.

never in school ,

hard knocks  got him through.

black and blue,

never cry,

because that's 

what a man must do.

Dad passed away,

Mom still plays her game,

now I'm old no one to blame.

from tears

I hope will put out the flame.

but I will never be the same, 

in the ashes I lay.

what's next,

we can only pray.

that what ever god,

they believed,

Will love us 

when I pass away.

Author's Note

i was drunk when i wrote it, never knowing what i had written, ive never meant to bring sadness, it was Pass, Present and Future, my title world in order, Babys and mothers , fathers and sons, This has always been a mans world and life goes on its about redemtion.
thank you for readind

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Such a sadness runs through your poem. From start to not quite the end, you showed how life has/ had been for you.. and, how hard it was, how deep the emotional scars left behind, Mauricio. But, be sure that there will be a warmth around the You who has suffered, yet shared to make others feel better in however way you could.. can. That god will know.

' .. baby boy took his first step. ~ never in school , ~ hard knocks got him through. ~ black and blue, ~
never cry, ~ because .. .. '

[Mauricio Montoya]

Emma, you've struck a cord, never though your input would be so deep, yet I do write to make a point, but this one nobody like to answer. thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard, honest and powerful poetry shared my friend.
"that what ever god,
they believed,
Will love me
when I pass away."
I had AWOL parent. I try to be a good father, a good grandfather. I don't believe love is deserved. Love is earned. Thank you Mauricio for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Mauricio Montoya]

it was something to write, thank for your input.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Mauricio.

[Mauricio Montoya]

right on bro, i alway look foward to ur reviews and emma's too, and many other writers because i will learn i had to make some changes because its not about me its everyone, look how we treat woman, even the bible say its okay. that's why i love this site we share, we cry, and bring comfort to our soul, and then write about it, lol thanks bro,

[barleygirl]

I love the truthfulness of your depiction -- the drudgery that life can be for many people. I love the "ho-hum" tone that suggests this narrator has no pie-in-the-sky hopes & therefore no big disappointments. Life is what it is & we each do our best to figure out what to do with this big bowl of tortured spaghetti. Your message is subtle but powerful, unique but universal (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mauricio Montoya]

okay thank you, food for thought.

[Fran Marie]

such a poignant sad
piece .a poem steeped
in sorrow where emotions
run deeply in pain.

The school of hard
knocks you had to
live through and yes
It's okay.for a man
to cry. even when
they must not;

[Mauricio Montoya]

Fran sorry for the sadness, we all have something we wish, hope but never go away. Thank you