Those Around Us

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All those around me,

when i was born.

unaware because,

 I was to young to remember.

who i would one day,

 later know.

To slow to understand,

That,

tough men will stand

and those, the weak,

 are always ruled.

but choose to be free,

it was the hope

you promise me,

BUT

 if only they could see.

your Love rings free,

forever.

Author's Note

this is to everyone who believed in something. thank you for your visit.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

There's something about the pacing of your poem that gave me the sensation that I was climbing a ladder up-up-up toward some bigger realization, as if you were slowly gathering steam toward your reveal at the end. Nicely done for how it makes the reader FEEL the journey you're referring to. Having been abused constantly thru my childhood years, I've always said that it was the abundance of love in my life that helped me escape severe damage (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mauricio Montoya]

thanks Margie i forgot something i just added, FOREVER, thank you for taking the time and your input, it makes me a better writer.

[Chris Shaw]

I kept thinking about the warmth and safety of the family unit. At least mine was. There was alot of love there. I felt that in this poem. Thank you.

Chris

[Mauricio Montoya]

yes family is every thing but the one i would know later is the God I understand we all have something we cling to when all else fails. but you hit on the nail there will always be love. thank you so much Chris

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Love can change many things for the better and I’m not talking romantic love. If people gave more lbs in general there would be less chaos overall. That is what your last line in this poems makes me think. Great write my friend

[Mauricio Montoya]

thanks my friend

[Mauricio Montoya]

who do think was around me I would later know?