Stand Off

peace

 

Stand Off

 

 

I challenge others, often not myself.
To justify what’s right from wrong.
A perception perceived from indifference.
This resentment I've longed.
If a solution is not placed on the table

 Can a house divided win?

If unable to look within

My discord can’t be resolved

If we can’t see eye to eye

Or put aside that dreadful sin

 We often, call pride.

With valiant valor and some aggression,

The strongest leaves the last impression.

With concessions, unwilling to concede,  

Only weakens the stand,

That we are all created Equal.

Remember,

 The needs of many

 Far outweigh that of one

And a lack for empathy will be the downfall

To cloud above

 A basic understanding of integrity

 Through compassion and love

For the greater good

A common goal,

We should humble and cherish

For it has been told

From many generation long ago

Plant the seed

For what you reap you sow

And that will live

within your hearts and soul. 

By Mauricio Montoya

 

 

Author's Note

I’ve been stuck working on this piece for a month, your input is always greatly appreciated,
I’m a member of a club and sometimes people want to impose what they think is right without thinking of others and it happens everywhere

Reviews

[Celeste21]

The first line is gold. How often do we all challenge others and pick out what is wrong with everyone else. We turn the finger on ourselves at times but sometimes not to the same degree and sometimes we are even more harsh with other people. Sigh.. the ability to be understood, a constant quest.

"Oh, the comfort, the inexpressible comfort of feeling safe with a person, having neither to weigh thoughts nor measure words, but pouring them all out, just as they are, chaff and grain together, certain that a faithful hand will take and sift them, keep what is worth keeping, and with a breath of kindness blow the rest away.” -Dinah Craik

[Akshat♥]

awww..so good
i really liked it:)
yeah i absolutely agree with you..
remarkable piece:)

[Alicia Schroeder]

I think it's great just how it is.. the last four lines really sum it all up.. Great peice:)

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

I especially like the line "The strongest leaves the last impression"...I am glad that I chose this one to read this morn..Enjoyed..Very gifted writer...May your gift expand and overflow onto the pages of WritersCafe...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sunflower

[An Ordinary Woman]

The last four lines say it all. I enjoy your eloquent style of writing. It's refreshing to an old gal like me. lol

[Ron]

Very profound and charming challenge in this poem. Another winner from the bold Montoya!

[roarke]

yeah, that's the downside of "clubs"

I see this piece as one of universal struggle. The way through it is planting the seeds. Yet, it is a long process that many of us don't have the patience to last until the harvest.

Mauricio, I think your piece stands pretty strong as it is. To me the purpose of prose is more the meaning than the form. Your piece has meaning.

[SpitfireGrrrl]

Great message - and so very true. Everyone wants to be "right", no one wants to compromise or learn. Excellently done.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great statement in this well written poem!

[emmajoy]

Everyone has the right to opinions, but being disrespectful of and indifferent to other people's feelings is insulting. We all need to think twice before speaking, tolerance and empathy are sadly lacking in today's society.

Your thoughts and words are very powerful here. Inspiring poetry.

[Stef Outsiders]

Strong piece.. and you are right people to speak before they think! I use to be like that but I realized i was hurting a lot of people in the process. So I can relate...

Great work though!