Stand Off

peace

 

Stand Off

 

 

I challenge others, often not myself.
To justify what’s right from wrong.
A perception perceived from indifference.
This resentment I've longed.
If a solution is not placed on the table

 Can a house divided win?

If unable to look within

My discord can’t be resolved

If we can’t see eye to eye

Or put aside that dreadful sin

 We often, call pride.

With valiant valor and some aggression,

The strongest leaves the last impression.

With concessions, unwilling to concede,  

Only weakens the stand,

That we are all created Equal.

Remember,

 The needs of many

 Far outweigh that of one

And a lack for empathy will be the downfall

To cloud above

 A basic understanding of integrity

 Through compassion and love

For the greater good

A common goal,

We should humble and cherish

For it has been told

From many generation long ago

Plant the seed

For what you reap you sow

And that will live

within your hearts and soul. 

By Mauricio Montoya

 

 

Author's Note

I’ve been stuck working on this piece for a month, your input is always greatly appreciated,
I’m a member of a club and sometimes people want to impose what they think is right without thinking of others and it happens everywhere

Reviews

[Celeste21]

The first line is gold. How often do we all challenge others and pick out what is wrong with everyone else. We turn the finger on ourselves at times but sometimes not to the same degree and sometimes we are even more harsh with other people. Sigh.. the ability to be understood, a constant quest.

"Oh, the comfort, the inexpressible comfort of feeling safe with a person, having neither to weigh thoughts nor measure words, but pouring them all out, just as they are, chaff and grain together, certain that a faithful hand will take and sift them, keep what is worth keeping, and with a breath of kindness blow the rest away.” -Dinah Craik

[Art]

nice work Mauricio, and this is how division is sowed, when there is no consideration for others...society is so far away from being within a state of cooperation and that is why there is no peace in this world...

nice work my friend...

[howlfjdks]

For people to be reminded we are all created equal, I am definitely on board with that.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the ideas in the poem and I don't believe that a house divided can win.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Strikingly inspirational piece. Much wisdom penned here.

[Ice QueenJen]

You promote a strong message about other people imposing their views on others. I love this writing although in this one sentence -" Far out weight that of one", I think you should change the word weight to weigh. It would sound better, otherwise the other words are very strong!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

so much strength in this poem, it really stands out from the rest! nice!

[The Analog Kid]

A powerful question on the need to give and take. Something different, but a feeling we all get from time to time.