mist

mist

A Poem by CHRIS ANDES
"

..feel the rain...

"






why does rain collides with pain?
in every drop
there is solitude,
with every fall
there's the cold.

even a love song
sings with this feelin',
within this drizzle
just like 'walking in the rain'
or listen to the 'thunder'.

victims of unhoped for future,
unspoken truth and betrayal
drowned with tears
of foolishness, of innocence..
all flow with the rain.

thunderin' sound
of heartbeats broken,
lightning from dark
dreams of uncertainty
sparks never- ending

sudden stops of rain fallin'
swiftly dissolved from heaven
left I, with silver mist
rolled down...
from my own cheeks.







-musicfunk-



© 2013 CHRIS ANDES


Author's Note

CHRIS ANDES
a heavy rain last night rose up my alpha state after a hard day dealing with this cruel thing called reality.
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"just like 'walking in the rain" wordplay!!!! awesome! my only critique is that in the first paragraph, shouldn't it be "Why does rain collide with pain?" and not, "why do rain collides with pain?". that was the only mistake i caught and other than that nice work, i personally love the rain.

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

thanks rachel 'walking in the rain is a song actually
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it's beautiful! There's so much feeling and it flows really well. :)

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Beautifully haunting... the rain is so mysterious... makes for magic and metaphors and your writing brilliantly moves over the heart and mind.. So amazing...

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

thanks a lot
i never meant to be that way
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Pax
this is really nice... i say rain has this lonesomeness on its drops that opens wounds in our hearts...

nice one kabayan!

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

t.y
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I think your images just make your poems:]]

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

yeah it's hard to choose images for a poem
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thanks
very well written.

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The real word will do that to ya. Great Job

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

yeah
thanks
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Wow...that's very well written. I loved it

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

thanks B.W.
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thanks guys for patiently reading my work
I've done the editing
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First of all, I love the picture. Second, I love this poem because it is very visual. You can literally see every line that you've written. All you really need to do is watch for the grammar mistakes, which aren't many. I love this overall :)

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CHRIS ANDES

11 Years Ago

=]...sweet thanks

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