LET ME BE

I was lost

Soft tender lips

let be thy wine,

to your life's so cruel

may I be your shoulder?

cuddle on the rainbow

let days be ours,

so time passed care not I 

to be your history,

tremblin' as the wind

let me be your breath,

between your lies 

the truth be I

touch me not to my soul for

I afraid beggin' you to be real,

intertwine with existence

still I mere livin' a dream.

-musicfunk-

Reviews

[Daniel88Batson]

Please sort out your grammar. Some of this is being lost because your sentences don't stop...

[lady france]

short but full of images.

[Amila Jay]

wow, words in reverse format, taking life aback, great write!!

[Joshua]

I like it a lot.

[Melinda Weber]

just lovely :)

[natzky]

really nice', a lot of imagery, really awesome..:)

[S Sanders]

I like the second stanza. It could probably stand on it's own, even without the first six lines. Either way, it's different and cool.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Really nice, love the beginning.

[Charile]

Wow. This is great. I love it.

[Parashar]

deep emotions , well expressed