FINGERTIPS

FINGERTIPS

A Chapter by christine zapanta andes
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my haiku's =]

"
FINGERTIPS 

The warmth I felt through 
Sudden touch your arms let go 
Singin' me as so.

Mutual ties collide 
When your hold with mine subside 
it's within unhide. 

You call me crazy
'coz this feeling's unwary
faded and empty. 

Lonesome embraces 
Li'l fingers lined with spaces 
that's spread in hopeless. 

Like glimpse from afar swiftly grip my arms to fly 
you're a shooting star. 

As your hands fit mine
Loneliness can never find 
just as our faith bind. 

Every touch so speak 
our eyes met though never break 
let me not awake.

-musicfunk-


© 2012 christine zapanta andes


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...I right a lot of sad/ melancholy poems and the like, but this one is amazing! You were able to catch the essence of love and emptiness, colliding to make what some would call..... forgiveness' no? anyway great job; would love to read more of your work

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

christine zapanta andes

7 Years Ago

thanks a lot =]
Hope's Etro

7 Years Ago

Aways welcome my sweet ^.-
christine zapanta andes

7 Years Ago

:)



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...I right a lot of sad/ melancholy poems and the like, but this one is amazing! You were able to catch the essence of love and emptiness, colliding to make what some would call..... forgiveness' no? anyway great job; would love to read more of your work

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

christine zapanta andes

7 Years Ago

thanks a lot =]
Hope's Etro

7 Years Ago

Aways welcome my sweet ^.-
christine zapanta andes

7 Years Ago

:)
Really cute! great job! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It would not be good to use more punctuation, as some of your phrasing reads strange without it, like this line, "Call me. I'm crazy." And because of the syllabic restrictions haiku have, a few lines seem forced. Outside of that, though, these are wonderful bits of thought.

Posted 7 Years Ago


GunMetal

7 Years Ago

Perhaps:
Call me crazy 'coz
this feeling is unweary (unwary?)
faded and empty.
christine zapanta andes

7 Years Ago

maybe I'll just put there 'you called me crazy
coz thi.. read more
GunMetal

7 Years Ago

That works too =)
No problem
I liked this melody-like poem, with so soft words of love, specially the last verses :
let me not awake.
~nia~

Posted 8 Years Ago


I really like this, the ending stanza is nice, and I as well enjoy this part:
"Lonesome embraces
Li'l fingers lined with spaces
that's spread in hopeless.

Like glimpse from afar swiftly grip my arms to fly
you're a shooting star. "

Posted 8 Years Ago


woow this is good keep it up

Posted 8 Years Ago


The simple contact of hands and fingertips are the thing we will need and miss. I like the desire and description in this poem. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is such a lovely dream to never be awaken of! and stay in for the rest of your life, however we need to wake up, so elusively brilliant! thank you a lot for sharing this. Great three lined rhyme lines!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Thanks to WC it took me twenty minutes to find this again. And I'm so glad I did. Sublime. Absolutley sublime

Posted 8 Years Ago



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