WHY ME

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                     WHY ME?

 

 Why did you choose me out of a million girls?

 

Do you really love me?

 

Am i really your number one?

 

Where ever we go and if we see a girl you flirt with them that makes me debate if you really love me!

 

Thats not love when you figure out what it is tell me?

 

Love is gentle your rough love is calm your not i gave it up to you and know thats all you want thats not really love at all!

 

 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

this is really a blog, not a poem
a poem is a re-wording of reality w/ metaphors and/or imagery, not just a summarization in plain English
if it's prose it should have twists and turns
if it's lyrical it should have an angelic quality
etc etc etc...
not asking you to be as abstract as me or anyone else, but give me something that makes me think
and someone can judge me for posting this, but I was sent a friend request w/out being given the courtesy of a review
sometimes criticism is necessary to help someone grow
good poetry doesn't happen over night and it takes a good balance of desire ingenuity and effort
if you wanna help solve your man problems, start w/ yourself
start by empowering yourself and building your self image
ask him if he's really flirting or just being friendly, you'll understand his answer by his emotional state when you ask.
if he turns out to be a d****e, dump him and focus on yourself til someone better comes along.
I could be like most people and placate you and pat your back ,but what's the point.
There's a time to be superficial and a time to speak about reality

[tizzy k]

thanx

[ariel-the-little-mermai..]

vary true i like it and know the feeling

[tynamite]

This poem is so true. I like the weird sentence structure. I've favourited it.

[Dushyant Thadani]

Well technically these are your thoughts and not a poem. but your writing is interesting. Well your writing is precise about your thoughts, but you should look at the type of writing. You are mistaken that way.

[paul]

ahh.. one in a million

love is confusing
and confused for other things
but i haven't figured any of them out

[Cherrie Palmer]

very good
it would be fun if you wrote another one letting him give a rebuttal

[Amanda]

It looks as though you definitely have something deep, something difficult to say going on here. Your honesty and emotional openness are captivating to me, as a reader. My only suggestion would be to find a way to somehow take these emotions, these things you're trying to express, and word them in a way that's not so forward. Make the reader work to find the real meaning. Don't stop writing!

[Collect-Eye]

well I didn't get any hate mail over this, so I guess people got that I say these things out of love.
I spent a long time just randomly writing anything and everything that popped into my head. I didn't judge it for it's emotional or literary merit or lack of...I just wrote
and when the time came I buckled down, and I overcompensated w/ ridiculous metaphors that often sounded like pure jibberish
and then I shifted back to the cycle of becoming simpler from the cycle of becoming complex.
so in the end, maybe I just went into those places inside myself w/ my writing because I had to, and I should let your creative powers manifest naturally
I guess I just worried the back patting was counter-productive
so I'm hoping that last review was s nudge and this is more of a smile or a wink..not the flirtacious kind, but more likely how I would heterosexually wink at a man.