Thrown

Wholesome care

in addition

describing the dawn

in sleepless time

hoping for a crimson

door to heaven

Inside the corners

of a shiny doorstep

Waiting for the sign

of summing

Reliving the hunt

for life

We dream onto a day

of foiled surreal 

Lingering teachings

a feather figure

to land a landfill 

of subjects we left to talk

naked renditions of seconds

placing no preconditions

to the heart 

Reviews

[Spencer Barker]

I see this as a natural human need to search for what we want most, what makes us most happy. I could be wrong, but either way, this is quite beautiful. The painting is quite the pairing for this piece as well. Thank you for sharing. :)

[Nisreen]

Thank you Spencer
I guess all we need is love.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words and thoughts. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to good closure. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nisreen]

Thank you Coyote

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Einstein Noodle]

each couplet a new twist ... the fourth couplet is a turn in my eye ..and as i read the next four or five i am reading my attempting to understand your poem ..to place a thread through it ..but i cannot :} the closing feels very positive ... naked fearless showing of vulnerability ... with no judgements ...i like it! you have expressed yourself and i sense you reached a catharsis in its completion ..but it is very enigmatic and abstract ... the risk being we fail to make a point that is important to us ..(i confess i do that quite a bit myself:)
E.

[Nisreen]

I guess I do that Alot ..... Thank you E for this thorough review

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ................

[Richard Patrick]

it was great, I thank you for the poem. Keep the faith in the beauty who you be, The peom is beautiful, keep the words a coming love. Take the day as it comes.

[Nisreen]

Thanks ......

[dan]

This seems to be a stream of consciousness musing using images softened by daylight dew to communicate a feeling of serenity. Sometimes disjointed thoughts can contain far more meaning than the most carefully chosen words can convey. A very beautiful piece. take care...dan

[Nisreen]

Thank you Dan :)

[Rhia Barton]

Love it! I've always said that I love it when people use images as stimuli and it's such an interesting image to use as well. Awesome piece :)

[Nisreen]

Thank you Ria

[Nisreen]

Sorry typo Rhia

[Rhia Barton]

Haha, no problem

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Very Nice!

This is like an artistic painting. A poem in stilllife form. This flows like a feather across an artistic landscape, bouncing gently from one image to the next to finally land on the heart, in peace and in a state of contentment.
Lovely writing, as always, Nisreen.
And that photo. I just love it! Care to elaborate on it?
Excellent poetry, as always.

[Nisreen]

Thanks ..............

[Hannah Grace]

Very good. Thank you for sharing.

[Nisreen]

Thank you Hannah

[Hannah Grace]

No problem

[outspoken1234]

very good writing. I enjoyed it thank you for letting me read it.

[Nisreen]

Thank you for your review

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Well done!

[Nisreen]

Thank you Emily