Space Bender

Space Bender

A Poem by Nisreen

Convex in nature 
Opulent to the touch 

The petition left to tone
Some form of nature

Forged out of tendency
The element of self ridden time

The must have of the meanings
Calling to a place

Just in time the luck strikes
Travel of thought taken

Sitting by the tide
Branding the silence

A stare lost out
Driving pass the midnight 

© 2016 Nisreen


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This for me reflects a moment passing and the daydream that dwells on that moment.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nisreen

1 Year Ago

Right on the money
Thanks for your review
andrew mitchell

1 Year Ago

😁😊😊😊😊😊😊
It is said that time and space are straight lines, horizontal to each other. As we sit alone, staring lost n=into this space we dream and hope for some kind of guidance, maybe even an answer to a question. If only we had the time to discover...if only our thoughts would curve into one another...if only space wasn't eternal.
Very cool, your style is out of this world. : )

Posted 1 Year Ago


Nisreen

1 Year Ago

Thank you will
and the thought reaches the page...sometimes we have to bend that space quite a lot to get it there.
but it is called to that place, and we poets help it get there.
j.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Nisreen

4 Years Ago

We sure do
Thank you Jacob
'Space Bender'
Precious Seconds,
To me this was a writing of life having times
which seem predestined and are perfect.
'Forged out of tendency
The element of self ridden time
'The must have of the meanings
Calling to a place'
I can identify with the context of this writing.
Elements just fall together within a season,
a moment, an experience. As your title explains,
Space bender...just on time.
Blessings,
Kathy


Posted 4 Years Ago


Nisreen

4 Years Ago

Thank you dear Kathy
The title really captured me and drew my attention to this poem. It's very interesting. Your phrasing and structure and flow add an element that's very unique. Thank you for sharing, my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nisreen

7 Years Ago

Thank you Micael
I enjoyed the poem. Made the reader think and ponder.
"Sitting by the tide
Branding the silence"
I liked the above lines. Great meaning in the simple statement. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nisreen

7 Years Ago

Thank you C
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are welcome dear Poet.
Eh, inconsistent and that really ruins an otherwise acceptable thing.

Some of your stanza's are self contained while others are not....

For example these do not stand on their own (a comma might help one of them)
"Forged out of tendency
The element of self ridden time"

(add a comma after tendency, it helps more than the aesthetic of not having punctuation)

"Just in time the luck strikes
Travel of thought taken"


(Change "travel" to "travels" or add a "the" at the start of the second line.)

I imagine this is about a watch and the arbitrary nature of the human perception of time. Pretty good idea if that's the case.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nisreen

4 Years Ago

Thank you David
To me this represents the struggle for identity. Endless nights awake fighting for answers all alone..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nisreen

7 Years Ago

Maybe so. Maybe Not
This has such a dreamlike quality to your words, which I imagine as a movie reel playing out images to your words, with the images and words melting into one, bending light, reality and imagination.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nisreen

7 Years Ago

Not sure why this piece got so much attention
Thank you so much
Makes me want to go sit on the beach all night...not this time of year, though, way too cold.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Nisreen

7 Years Ago

I think we still have beach time here maybe Two more weeks

Thank You James

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Added on December 6, 2016
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