Kit-Cat-Toe

Sugar, spice, everything nice

One two one
I've come undone in
Your barefoot summer gaze
Across the road
I skip down rows of
Numbers squared in stone
To play our phosphorescent game

Swim through me cosmically

Sunset fields in stardust shower
Humble roses white and red--
Blend in pinky-promise flowers
Turn the rumours outside-in
Photosynthetic love devours sunlight
Miracles

Chasing motes into the sea
Our comet tails in solar wind
Like dandelion debris
The witching hour came and went
Still the moon calls to us, yet

Days in dream
Nocturnal nights
Outside, candles melt our sin
Drizzling droplets
Lavender fill
The tatters in our skin

How could I deserve such beauty--I'm your beast
It's still enough to trace your scent
Of petals shed up to their stems
Down locked-arm trails of memory

Author's Note

The innocence of love is hard to justify when so much pain is found. The pain within ourselves can inhibit and distort how we express our feelings towards one another. But seeing the beauty in a person and maybe even helping them discover it for themselves becomes its own reward whether or not romantic emotions persevere.

Reviews

[Lovecraft]

Very descriptive and captivating visuals. The whole "Cosmic" angle was a fine touch too. I loath insipid love poetry, so, in my eyes, this poem is far better than the works I so abhor. So that's one of the greatest compliments you could possibly receive from me.

Keep on with the great work

:) :) :) :)

[transentience]

Thank you for your thoughts. I agree with you on the insipid love poetry, but I try to be as authentic as possible, and this just happened to express what I felt at the time. I tried to make things more interesting with peculiar phrases and thought provoking descriptions at least

[Lovecraft]

That is what I like about your poetry. Hell, all of my love poetry tends to be fairly dark.

[Ken Simm.]

I like the way you visually and sensusually describe the feelings engendered here when looking at the loved one. It provides a flow through the write that takes the reader along the pathways of experience. Perhaps their own and that includes the other main protagonist here. The loved one, him/herself.

[KWP]

oh ... what a lovely and most refreshing read and sentiment ... sounds like a perfect day, a perfect date to dance within the burning embers of each other and know, yes know, that you shall rise again :)

[Cortana]

I don't have the words. This is so incredibly good. Wow.
Man, I feel like such an amateur...

[transentience]

Your lack of words are more than enough, I truly am glad you enjoyed it. :3 I just have no life and spend way too much time arranging feelings to words...its a blessing and a curse

[Einstein Noodle]

lots of wisdom and compassion in your note ..love your poem ..so full of imagery touching all our senses ... great job says i! enjoyed reading very much ...very engaging start to finish :)
E.

[transentience]

Thank you good sir, as always. I changed a lot of things you posted your comment, I think its much better than before~ I owe you some reviews

[V]

I like the title and found some really well reading lines. Maybe too many cosmic words included but that's only my personal taste. I think you like to write like this so I'm not going to complain. Your author's note seems to be helpful to understand it. You have a strange, unique way to combine words and form them into pieces. Interesting but also opaque, difficult to get somehow.

[Inject Positivity]

Loved your choice of words... Loved the imagery in the poem, I really enjoyed how you put a thought provoking thought in this one... I was deeply moved by this... Love is a gift, and it becomes more beautiful when we realize the other person's beauty even if they have many flaws.... Well done, very well thought out work.... You have presented it very well... I really like your author's note....

[transentience]

I don't know what to say...you made my day :33

[Anna]

This was really beautiful. I really enjoyed the images you shared through your words.

[transentience]

Thank you...Im always worried that I try too hard to be philosophical and that my image/flow suffers because of it, so its nice to hear otherwise~

[Anna]

You're welcome. Keep heading in this direction. It's working for you. :)

[Alexandra Hounschell]

This was really cute, and I adore the title

[transentience]

Yay! I came up with the tile after stepping on a container of Tic Tacs while barefoot lol :33

[Corset]

wonderful peeps up in here, I like the way it feels like endurance, as if the long road was taken through pitfalls and hurt-dles jumped, and still wondering what is left to prove oneself worthy

[transentience]

Thank you so much. Im turning this into a song and you gave me an idea of something to add with your review. :3

[Corset]

That is wonderful! I am so happy when something I say strikes up creativity :)