Letter

There's a happy sort of sorrow in her eyes while behind her fake smile she tries to hide.

"Waking up each morning

not knowing if its your last

because of all that happened

in your very troubled past

 

crying tears of blood
whenever you're in pain

not even sure

if you want to wake up again

 

but still you go on

or at least you have so far

waking up at home

but sometimes in a bar

 

find some way to relax

drink or smoke a joint

finding a good way to cope

never was your strong point

 

and so it continues

with the passing of each day

and probably will

untill you reach the grave

 

it seems so wrong

it can't be right

when what's killing you

is keeping you alive

 

how do you solve a problem

that is so strange

what's saving you is killing you

you're dying either way

 

please don't go

i need you to stay

we understand each other

always know what to say

 

I hope this is what you need

to see what we are

ruining ourselves

each new day, each new scar

 

at that I end my note

and say to you good night

wondering if in the morning

you will be alive"

 

this is what i think

this is what i need

for someone to write

in a letter to me.

Reviews

[zainul]

A letter to self!
A novel idea to tell one's pain and problems.
My most favorite stanza is
"this is what i think
this is what i need
for someone to write
in a letter to me."
I hope some one who you love will write such a letter soon.
I also like to congratulate you for the wonderful narrative in rhymes.

[B-poet]

I love this poem. I like how you've shedded light on how significant pain is in order to refine our purpose for living our daily lives. Very well written, emphatic, poignant, and the scope of originality is authentic in its own way. Great write. :)

[Twistedme]

Such strong raw emotion in this captivating piece, waiting for someone to share over whelming emotion in their love for you....sad of course but overall a great piece, love all the emotion that you have shared...

[no sun]

What a powerfully written piece with great sadness in it. But it also has hope. Love it!

[runaway smile_<3]

I absolutely love this piece.
Not only does it rhythm WELL(which, when done the right way, is very nice) but it makes sense, and it flows. Great job. I love your writing.

Wonderful form and well written. This story has also imparted its message well with good choice of words.

Good read.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

wow.... very powerful poem!! This just flowed greatly and i loved the rhyming... but thats cause theres always a part in my heart dedicated to rhyme lol... Very powerful, the emotions glided off the page and stabbed me in the heart making me ache and feel the writer's pain... Great job!