Oops

Oops

A Poem by BrokenButterfly
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Winding road
25(mph), all alone
turn off the music
turn off the noise
tune out the world
as you pass it all by
listen intently
you will hear
the gentle roar
as you steer
engine purrs
keys clank
wind goes by
sweet. Soft.
not enough.
45? 60? 95.
oh yeah...
it rained last night
tight corner
flooded road
oops
breaks squeel
not a chance
two wheels?
one? none.
roof. Wheels.
corn field.
Dead? no.
upsidedown? sideways.
bleeding? yes.
phone? no.
who will help?
who will find me?
isn't there someone there
beside me? no.
all alone.  Listen
water. peaceful
look. soft colors
feel. warmth
sunlight.
beautiful field.
restful waters
restless mind.
 

© 2013 BrokenButterfly


Author's Note

BrokenButterfly
umm.. yeah i have no idea what this was... just started writing

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I think you did really well on it for not knowing. I love how I can understand fully what's going on with such few words. Very interesting piece. Usually when I find works like this, the person won't use the right words, or they'll miss something and just.. it won't make sense. However you seemed to accomplish this rather well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Very intense. This poem is like a painting. Nice art piece.

Posted 5 Years Ago


LOLOLOL Now this was a dish I liked.



Please tell me I am not the only one to see the under line theme?

Posted 6 Years Ago


BrokenButterfly

6 Years Ago

I think you might be reading more into it than I intended, which is fine. Please tell me what underl.. read more
Sometimes I write about scary things... but never death.... or at least not my own. I think you caught the flashes of events well in this writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


AUTOMATISM. I do it all the time to flex my brain.

Posted 6 Years Ago


its nice a sort of rambling in the mind of a mistake. the last 2 lines are great

Posted 6 Years Ago


Alright so I only have one knit-picky thing to say and its that seven lines from bottom you wrote peacefull, when there's only supposed to be one L. Good job though aside from that, into my favorites it goes. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


BrokenButterfly

7 Years Ago

Oops! Thanks for letting me know!
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the best poetry comes from just letting it flow. this is an excellent write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


good stuff here i like it alot

Posted 7 Years Ago


Love this. Stopping and letting the world in is always the best.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow, this is awesome! The first couple lines hooked me right in and though normally I find poems without breaks or a lot of punctuation hard to read this one flowed perfectly without them and the ones you did use seemed perfectly placed. I love this because I can relate to it, I use to be quite the speed demon, but also because it's simple and sharp! Magnificent work! I'm favoriting XD

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I write when emotions are raw, and almost uncontrollable. It is a temporary fix to a long term problem - having too many thoughts in my head. Sometimes they just need to come out. more..

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