A Musing of Me

You left poems in me.

The air is pregnant with you;

I feel your lungs expanding

in the ground

as the Maple breathes,

and the salt decides to linger

around me.

And its just like you

to break the silence,

and call me over to see the sky

giving birth

to the other side of your gaze.

You would have written to me

about the paths between the clouds,

the mango glade on which you rest

the sea of purple at your feet.

Reviews

[Ed Hart]

what a beautiful poem, and the title fits perfectly

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What a beautiful person, and your comment means everything

[wordman]

beautiful images of a distant love,one of your best !

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Thank you Ron ((you)))

[wordman]

my pleasure,i kinda missed seeing you these last few days

[andrew mitchell]

I see an appreciation of nature going full circle in birth to death, autumn decay taking in a deep breath as one reflects on a loved one passing.

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I see an awesome person reading my page :)) thank you Andrew

[andrew mitchell]

Keep that up and I'll throw in an Earthquake!!!;):) To rattle and shake your senses of course!

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You're awesome Andrew :)

[Nisreen]

This air of love madness spreading this bliss of pure enchantment ..... making the world a beautiful place to breath in ..... making life worthwhile. ...... in a matter of seconds the ugliest of times turn into utter happiness ....

I love your words

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Thank you for coming by and leaving your footprints Nisreen :)

[Pete]

This is absolutely amazing. It is so smooth I actually can't get over it. It is just so beautiful. It evokes feelings of sadness and beauty and touches the soul very deeply. You've somehow managed to put words together that wouldn't normally go together which tug at my heart strings. Well done!

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Thank you so much, Pete :) Good to see you by. I will come visit soon

[James]

A very pretty poem, I don't really know how else to describe. Very spiritual and very mournful at the same time. It's not depressing, or uplifting, but has a very melancholic tone. I envision myself walking around outside, in a big grassy field on a beautiful day thinking about the person who has gone.

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That is perfect, James :) Thank you so much

[barleygirl]

I love this poem. It reminds me of my best friend who died a couple years ago & we would write poems & stories for each other & with each other. The last 4 lines are especially well-crafted & mind-blowing in the vivid imagery of how a person still continues a relationship with the deceased. Very powerful writing.

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I am honored this brought you fond memories. Thank you so much for sharing them and for your sweet review :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The first line sighs with sadness, with "You left poems in me," signifying that the one who left poems in you is no longer in your life. The beautiful feelings and memories left behind are brought to life in the lines which follow. There's no greater beauty than that of Mother Nature, and it's such a fitting tribute to the one you love. The imagery throughout is so pretty.

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What a lovely review...thank you :)

[Inject Positivity]

Very uniquely written... The title is an interesting one here... Although there a touch of sadness in it but I find it inspiring as you move on to show some beautiful aspects of our... You put nature in the poem which I believe is an amazing effort and it was really something great to read... There is beauty in everything, we just need to open our eyes to see and feel them....

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I sometimes like to manipulate words to provoke a different meaning, and nature was my first love, one I never get over :) Thank you for your warm review, dear poet :)

[Inject Positivity]

Nature for me is inspiration, I believe it's the truest form of love.... As I live very near to mount everest and 3-4 forests, I have grown up with nature... I think I need to visit your pages more often from now on, cause your works are beautiful.....

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Thank you for saying that...I am humbled

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Could not help but see in the title the way only a space keeps it from being "amusing" of me...in the sense of getting your attention and being enjoyable. It feels as if there is a touch of the loved one coming to you and relating in ways that would have been typical...through love of nature perhaps. The sadness in your heart is evident and although the poem is laced with that sadness, there is within it the sweet reminder that as you write:
"And its just like you
to break the silence,
and call me over to see the sky..." the loved one is always there when you get too sad, to remind you to look around and know they are with you. Your writing is so amazing!

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You are so kind, my dear. Thank you very much :)