A familiar Feeling

Lost from words,

she escapes.

Into a darker place,

full of mistakes.

The sense of dignity,

Creeps out from beneath.

The startling noises,

Slips from the creeks.

 

She sees a past picture,

full of love,

full of hate.

She does not know of what this is.

May it be her only way?

Besides from the unknown fact,

She feels a sense of comfort

for this un-revealing matter.

But is this not good nor bad?

Sad nor happy?

Dark nor light?

Maybe this is nothing.

Just a quick glance at something that

No longer lingers in her surrounding air,

But keeps traveling in her mind.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think... Thanks!

Reviews

[TigerSpirit]

If I may suggest...

This throws the poem off, perhaps replacing 'perspective' with 'sense'?
"She feels a perspective of comfort,"

This section here:
"Just a quick glance at something that no
Longer lingers in her surrounding air,"
I'd suggest shuffling the words a bit, end the first line in 'that'
begin the next line with 'no' it makes the poem read smoother and more rhythmically that way. Currently these 2 lines trip the reader up a bit

Hope I didn't offend :)

Other than that, very beautifully written :)

[David Marsden]

I would agree with TigerSpirit, all the words are there and the meaning comes across, the feeling, the passion etc. Just a little adjustment to the rythem. I never like to critisize anyone's poem, mainly because I'm not an expert and also because they are someone elses feelings and I believe they are there to be red and enjoyed and are not mine to alter, only the author has that right. But this isn't a criticism, just a sugestion.
The content of the poem is good and the way it evokes feeling is good also.
wether or not you decide to make the sugestion it won't alter the context or the quality of the meaning, just the rythm. Hope that makes sense.

[Annie Nicole]

Thank you for your honesty I appreciate it!