Desire

We all can feel alone sometimes

Desire is like gasoline, it can be used for the better or worse

It can fuel your engine and take you far

Or burn down your hopes and dreams

Desire in a way drives us all mad, but that can be good

Drive you mad enough so you go where others are afraid

And possibly change the world for the better

It can also lead you to the negative extremes

Where we all steer clear of

But in this case, I desire a companion

And yeah I know, who doesn't?

But holding onto your thoughts is dangerous indeed

Writing them down, or talking them through is healthy

And my hand is tired

Someone to encourage me when I set a goal

And to pick me up when I fall down

Someone just to lay by my side when we are too tired to carry on

And just relax, how great does that seem?

Somebody beautiful, on the inside and out

One who looks out for others before themselves, just like me

A leader who can lead me out of a rut

Mostly just somebody to care when all is wrong

When hope is lost and desire is on low

Someone to boost it back up

I want a companion, but yeah who doesnt?

Author's Note

Let me know what I did well, and what needs improvement!

Reviews

[M.E.Lyle]

Great thoughts, and yes, we all would like to have that special companion. I got lucky and found my wife. Together we've spent thousands of hours enjoying life as it should be.
What I liked, your description of desire and its affect on us.
Your description of that special someone.
I couldn't really find any faults.

[Mars Bear]

Really liked the way this came across. Seems a perfect spoken word piece. Great conversation almost sullen mood. Great goals to have.

[C.C. Marx]

We all have desires, but that's the beauty of them huh? Coming in all shapes and sizes but desires all the same. I love the line "Desire is like gasoline", i couldn't think of a better thing to compare it to. Nicely done

[Matthew James Ginn]

Great topic. Awesome way to introduce and ride it to the end. make the format a little more pleasing but other than that. thumbs up!

[Shari Robinson]

Good work, I love the opening phrase "Desire is like gasoline". Overall this could benefit from a little editing. especially regarding a couple of superfluous uses of 'the", such as "the better or worse" and "to the negative extremes" and I would change the "where' in "where we all steer clear of" to "that". Overall a good poem on a topic a lot of people can relate to. I hope you find your someone!

[Nene]

Nice poem... I agree with ANTO... As they say All good comes to those who wait ;) .... I like the poem... It literally took me to another world.. A world with a beautiful companion by my side

[Natureislelove]

Lovely poem. yes, We all do want a companion and we all want someone to encourage and pick us up. Amazing play of words. All the best.

[Emily]

'Desire is like gasoline'
Such a great line!
Well done!

[Riv]

Companions are hard to come by, whether it is your future wife, husband, room-mate adopted child. Everything we do and do hard for them is difficult in life. I love the effort you put in all of your poems, they always entertain me and I'm always excited and happy to read them. I'm only a novice myself, so there is not much I can give on improvement. Just keep writing and never give up.

[Nini]

Your play on words is brilliant. Your reference to gasoline and going into the better and worse is great. The positive and negative of desire...again, brilliant. Referring to thoughts being dangerous, but then saying how to deal with them in a healthy way....making your hand tired. Again, brilliant.
Now for the "advice" part...I'm not real good at that, but I'll give it a try. Truly, I love all of your poem and again, I will say, Brilliant. I think the only thing I might recommend would be, since you have named the poem "Desire", instead of stopping the poem with the line, "I want a companion, buy yeah who doesn't?"...take it one more line that has to do with desire. Maybe something to the effect of, "Desire...Do you have it? I do, but who doesn't?"
You have a lot of talent. Keep writing!!