I Died in My Dream

a dream

I Died in My Dream

 

In my dream

I was there

Lying as a corpse

Placed few feet in the soil

My legs were tied

My body wrapped like a mummy

My mouth was still

I would have cried

Like a kid

 

I was lowered in darkness

But I saw you in amazement

You were there

But my soul could be far

I heard every last cry

From my mother

Your mother

My brothers

They were together

In their words

Were like relieve

It cooled my minds, when they repeat

But I saw your eyes

All the same

I felt your cries

Weren’t yours

You looked and smiled

Stealthily, a large frown

My mind was wide

The heat that followed

Was beyond hell

The pain I felt

I could not tell

The pain beyond

Was from my broken heart

The love I nursed

Was what cut us apart

Your mind was far

Beyond the love you hold

Your grudge was that

I cheated once ago

My pleas of then

Were like air

That passes through the nose

And you broke the pillars of my heart

With your last words

You shook the host of hell

With such words

In Your tongues were stings

That never lived

in my heart such bitterness

I have never felt

 

But I woke,

 you were there, by my side

it was all a bad dream

a night mare

a wrong realm

of darkness

a misplaced night

A bitter sight

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

just a dream
feel free

Reviews

[Abhilash Hegde]

That's a terrible nightmare. Just reading it made me miserable, can't imagine going through this terrible dream. I like the way it has been written. The whole feel to the poem from start to end is disjoint, distort, hazy and some chills. So well done. Thanks for sharing, tumi!

[LVW]

I love how the poem has a distorted feel to it almost like your trying to remember something that keeps slipping away

[Betty Hermelee]

I can identify with bad dreams; i have them every once in a while, and you awake shocked and stunned at what just transpired...happily for you all the cheating and dark emotions in that dream were over once you awoke and your love was beside you...." your grudge was that I cheated once ago"...sometimes we think of of heavy emotional notions when we dream...very powerful write; thank you for sharing!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

I feel the power in this piece that dives under the surface and deep into the depths of another world. Dark and dreamy it leaves feelings of insecurity and unease. Well done

[Arundass TP]

Terrible nightmare. I can't even think. Good poem

[tumi]

thanks for the kind review
it means a lot

[Marie]

Wow! What a nightmare that dream was, dear tumi... So traumatic, I only realised I was holding my breath when I reached the last two words! A gripping write which drew me in and did not set me free until I had finished reading the poem! Well expressed, depiction is superb and this plain text is so very much easier to read, thank you for reverting back to it. GREAT write which in spite of the horror I felt, I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing, tumi...

[tumi]

thanks for the kind review
I'm happy you enjoyed reading
it means a lot

[Marie]

Most welcome always, tumi...

[Neville]

Dont think I would be able to sleep again for a month at least .. I think love can do that to ya .. nice one tumi .. or should that be ..

[tumi]

thanks for your kind review
it means alot

[berenongur]

And you broke the pillars of my heart
With your last words
You shook the host of hell
With such words
In Your tongues were stings
That never lived
in my heart such bitterness
I have never felt

ARE YOU KIDDING ME???

[tumi]

Lol
how was those lines
good or bad

[berenongur]

I'm glad it was just a dream and you woke up and gave us your wonderful poem.
The way you presented the words definitely opened new paths in my mind.
Everybody should see this but I'm jealous that I'm not the only one reading this, but we'll still make your voices heard :)

[tumi]

thanks for the kind review
i' m happy you enjoyed reading