Tall Dark Walls

Tall Dark Walls

A Poem by turtlegirlluver
"

Breaking down the walls you build to protect yourself

"

 Through the thick looming night

     under the cover of darkness

I was being buried alive

     trapped under this coffin of skin.

 

Every step was a step in blindness

     because you crowded my vision

Yet every breath counted more time

     that I was without you.

 

I lived behind these tall dark walls

     keeping others out

but what I didn't realize is that

     someone cared enough to tear them down.

 

Then you came along

     and the darkness began to fade

and I was alive

     for the first time in my life.

 

You are the current within me

     that gives me life.

You are the hope

     that gives my life meaning.

And you are the light

     that guides my every step.

 

Now the darkness is gone

and I have broken out from the walls

     that I hid behind for so long.

 

Through the bright sunny day

     the coffin disappears

Leaving me vulnerable

     yet protected forever by you.

© 2009 turtlegirlluver


Author's Note

turtlegirlluver
Something I came up with recently after seeing the words 'coffin of skin'- my mind instantly coming up with the first stanza, and the rest followed.

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I likr this piece a lot!
An amzing job! =)

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow thats ... wow im amazed its really thought out i really like it

Posted 13 Years Ago


..........
Now the darkness is gone
and I have broken out from the walls
that I hid behind for so long.
.........
A wonderfully crafted piece.
You've expressed these feelings (feelings I am no stranger to) incredibly well.
You show us sorrow but leave us smiling, assured that there is hope.
Lovely, lovely.
Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very good

Posted 13 Years Ago


Every step was a step in blindness

because you crowded my vision

Yet every breath counted more time

that I was without you.
------- my fav part, very well written and keep the attention very well too ^^

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I havent read your other recent poems but they have come along nicely.

This is such a perfect piece, amazing, glorious, any positive adjetive!



Posted 13 Years Ago


This was really well written!
It sounded so... amazing. :)

I love the descriptions.

Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love this piece! It sounds like something I would write. As far as content wise. ^^

I'm amazed...This is absolutely fantastic...I'm almost speechless...

I didn't see anything that directly needed to be changed, but I'm not that good of an editor, so there could be something that needs to be fixed.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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I love to perform, write, and read. I love sea turtles and want to save them. I am obsessed with music and listen to it any chance I get. I feel that writing is one of the best ways that I can express.. more..

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