Concrete Ocean

Concrete Ocean

A Poem by John P. Eiler

Because it's summer, I decided I'd describe my summer break.

The summer air feels good,
as I ride down the street,
on my bike.
It tires my feet.

So I sit down,
enjoy the air.
I'm so lazy,
but I don't care.

Or I'll ride my wave-board,
through the parking lot,
Like a concrete ocean,
It relaxes me a lot.

I get back home,
I feel like I should.
These dog days of summer
feel oh, so good.

© 2010 John P. Eiler

Author's Note

John P. Eiler
Concrete Ocean is not only a metaphor describing the parking lot but also describes the way wave-boarding feels, which feels like surfing.

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very well interconnected descriptives~ a subtle and personal moment percieved described in a smooth and in the moment way that takes the reader wholly there~well done~

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John P. Eiler
John P. Eiler

Irving, TX

I'm a young writer, and I love poetry and fantasy stories. I've never finished a book, but I like to write for fun. I also love to play music. I play instruments such as the Piano, Guitar, and even th.. more..