Love Milk

Like the first taste of mothers milk,
I crave
You've breast fed my soul;
nurtured my famished heart

This infant love;
 passion child
Let it suckle,
So it can grow

Your love does my body good

Reviews

[Elle Thompson]

I can see where using milk as a metaphor for love seems like a good idea, I think as a concept it has a lot of potential. However, I simply cannot take this piece seriously after the line "You've breast fed my soul". Personally I would have been a little more abstract with my treatment of this subject, say what you mean without saying it.

[gombeggar]

amusing...but it does lend itself to an Oedipus complex fer sure

[Simon Welsh]

Nice! Love can poison however.

[jinxxnij]

interesting concept. I like your creativity. you have a great mind. your writing speaks volumes about who you are and that says a lot.

[Astro]

Great use of the pop culture reference, to add impact to an interesting scenario regarding the way we feel about our lovers. Good one.

[Ency Bearis]

A wonderful metaphor well said and done.

[DIVYA]

This is a beautiful thought very well expressed but somehow the mother's milk parallel just did not work for me. Thanks for the RR anyway.

[Gerald Parker]

The power of the thought turns this short piece into a sort of poem. However, there is a wee problem here - you cannot crave like the first taste of mother's milk - it doesn't make sense. It needs changing > 'I crave for your love: it is like the first taste of mother's milk...' ?

[MoriartyMesa]

In some correction, did you mean 'to feed my soul'?