His biggest fear was of drowning

His biggest fear was of drowning

A Poem by under-the-water


 

When you think of me

I hope your throat swells up.

And you can taste the sea stinging every memory

That you ever had of me.

 

 

When you think of me

I hope your eyes will start to throb.

And your lungs will burn out.

With the salt.

 

When you think of me

I hope you get caught under a tidle wave of misery

And your tears flood every last breathe of bliss

That was ever possible for you to inhale.

 

When you think of me

I hope you drown.

I hope you drown in the depression

Confusion

Pain

That I once drowned in

Because of you.

 

When you think of me

I hope the sea scratches at your throat

till it bleeds empathy

 

When you think of me

I hope the salt stings

Every loving imprint that I’ve left on you

Till you cry guilt.

 

And when you think of me

I hope that tidle wave holds you under long enough

Till you start to regret

Those last five words of:

“Jessica, your just not enough”

 

But then

you realize

that your too late

And now all your left with

Is me as your biggest fear.

© 2012 under-the-water


Author's Note

under-the-water
i remember this boy who i fell in love with told me that his biggest fear was to drown. my biggest fear was to lose him - and this poem is sort of about how he put me through my biggest fear - so i wanted him to feel what my biggest fear felt like - while he was experiencing his - if that makes any sort of sense what so ever.

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Yeah. I went into the ocean once during a vacation--and when I hit the waves for the first time in my life, I got a crash course in marine life. Lord I can still taste the salt water threatening to pull me under. I was panicking and thought it was an undertow--turns out it was just the strength of the waves.
Lord, what sheer power!
This poem made me think of that. I like the metaphors in it--they meld very well together

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Yeah. I went into the ocean once during a vacation--and when I hit the waves for the first time in my life, I got a crash course in marine life. Lord I can still taste the salt water threatening to pull me under. I was panicking and thought it was an undertow--turns out it was just the strength of the waves.
Lord, what sheer power!
This poem made me think of that. I like the metaphors in it--they meld very well together

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have written a wonderful poem.
The repeated use of the line,"When you think of me" makes me plunged into dream.
You wanted the boy to feel your biggest fear of losing him.So you put him under the condition which was his biggest fear.
I like your candid tit for tat philosophy for getting the boy.
Marvelous idea!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

under-the-water

8 Years Ago

thank you so much!!!! ahhhh i wasn't sure if the poem made any sense at all - this is awesome!! than.. read more
zainul

8 Years Ago

Thanks to you for writing a lovely poem which allowed me to learn about under-the-water phenomena.read more

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