Another Love

A poem I wrote, partially based on an anecdote, just to let it out on paper (if that makes sense). It's my first ever poem, so structure and rhymes are all over the place. Gotta start somewhere tho :)

Another love.

Just another way to express myself;

Just another life with another love.

Maybe depressed,

But maybe oppressed.

Maybe I love her,

But then again, maybe I don't.

Who's to say what love is?

But who's to say what love isn't?

This is life.

Life this is.

Reality growing,

Reality showing.

And being just what it needs to be;

Just another way to tell you who I am:

A heartbroken guy,

A sad guy,

Who's love was forced to end.

They couldn't keep it going.

Even after trying to amend,

He couldn't keep it flowing.

Not because of a strife,

No, no,

This is just life.

And even though I know I should move on,

Here I am,

Still clinging on.

Because I loved her.

Because I love her.

I could never say goodbye;

I could never replace her by,

Another love

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

Good start, Benter! A thing you could do is to pick a style that you like and pattern your poem to its sounds and structure and shape. A poem, it has been said, looks like a poem, sounds like a poem, and feels like a poem. All those elements are present in 'Another Love' in varying degrees. A last element which is often overlooked can be described in some circles as 'conceit;' I'd much rather call it organic unity - that it can stand on its own and BE. If you are satisfied with your poem, you have come to a point where it is its own entity. Thanks for sharing.