Im coming

Im coming

A Poem by Harley (arbiter)
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Long distance relationship

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im coming my love,

 on the wings of a dove.  

 

 they do not fly fast,

 but our love will last.  

 

  you promised me and i promised you,

 that we would power through.      

 

 the distance wont keep us apart,

 we have love and thats a start.    

 

 i dont care if youre dad doesnt like me,

 if he'd give me a chance he'd see.  

 

  one day ill traverse the land,

 just to hold youre hand.    

 

 i cant right now,

 someday ill find ou how.  

 

 well be together,

 ill be beside you forever.      

 

 one day my girl,

 ill give you the world                                            

                   S

© 2012 Harley (arbiter)


Author's Note

Harley (arbiter)
I'm on a crappy *smart phone* can't shift or hit enter. It don't really matter how it looks its the message and if the message gets to the person I want it too so eh. Review rate I guess.

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I love how you compared a dove to love, its a very nice write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Remember when we were messaging and you said "Why do you girls have the superpower to twist our words?" and I said back "And you have a superpower too- to make me laugh.". You have another superpower: To remind me of memories I've stowed away, and make me drop to my knees and just start bawling out tears.

Not a lot of people can do that.
Rating: 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


Harley (arbiter)

7 Years Ago

I'm sorry. ... wait is that bad?
A. V. Madison

7 Years Ago

Nonononono, It's good!
Harley (arbiter)

7 Years Ago

Oh. Then Thanks
This is exactly how I feel.No more to say. I love this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


wow... i'm stunned into silence by this poem. it connects greatly to your other one abut the gf and dad in the car accident. i love each of them, and love how each of them connects to make a bigger story

Posted 7 Years Ago


i love this it is a great write even if you did it on a smart phone haha anyways i love it

Posted 7 Years Ago


These words are so lyrical that they played through my mind as a song. This is one of those pieces of work that just want to come to life. I dont think you will ever be whole again. You've left a part of yourself in these words and they will stand the test of time.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow, this is so inspiring. You should check out my newest poem, standing up for myself. I wish I could sound as romantic as you. I'm just...blunt. Ha ha, that's me I guess.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is so sweet. I like the style, once I get used to the formatting. Nice write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I actually like the format. It's staccato and haltering. Spelling is fine; grammar is not, but phones do that. "traverse the land" is great. What are you, always online by the way?

Posted 7 Years Ago


lol this poem kind of reminds me of thousand miles by vanessa carlton, no matter what it takes the person will find a way back to their love. Good job, I really enjoy your poetry :)

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on June 16, 2012
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Tags: love, pain, distance, hurt, happyness

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Harley (arbiter)
Harley (arbiter)

the age of classic rock , AR



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I am different. I am the unforgiven. I was born october 1997. I just write because I want to express my feelings in more ways than music and art. I'm just a guy trying to get out of the rain and sur.. more..

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