Hate me

Hate me

A Poem by Harley (arbiter)
"

Anger messes everything up. Everyone else speaks out of anger so I'll let some of mine come out

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ill leave you alone,

 but ill keep you on my phone.

 

 ill give you space,

 i wont haste.  

 

  ill wait as long as it takes,

 when youre ready ill cross the states.  

 

 you almost lost youre dad,

 i can see why youre mad.  

 

 it wasnt my mistake,

 but you think it was of my make.    

 

 i cant say how sorry i feel,

 please believe me im for real.    

 

 look past the angered hate,

 to that one friday date.  

 

 what we have doesnt have to die,

 believe me i dont lie.  

 

 now you dont talk to me,

 but what you dont see:        

  Goddmit IM SORRY! ITWASNT EVEN MY FAULT I HAD NO CONTROL I DIDNT WANT THAT TO HAPPEN BUT YOU STILL BLAME ME

© 2012 Harley (arbiter)


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See? Now I understand who this poem is about.

The last line, though it is seperated from the rest of the poem, shows potential. It's powerful. That first stanza was brilliantly written. Overall, good job. Not your best, but like your description says- this is only unleashing a little stress, and should not be taken heavily. But for just letting out a little steam, pretty well-written. I can see some thought went into this. Overall, magnificent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Harley (arbiter)

7 Years Ago

Uh you're thinking of the wrong person I just know it. I wrote this a while back.
Don't beat yourself up over this. It wasn't your fault, as you've stated and people who are mature enough to understand that will forgive you in time, if they don't then they simple need someone to blame. Very good poem. Thanks for sharing your work with the world!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Humm it is not the anger that messes things up..it is the individuals way they express it that creates problems....but taking the time to learn why anger is present...to control how & when it is expressed is a major key to communication

Posted 7 Years Ago


wow i can feel the raw emotion in your powerful words, i can relate so much to this poem, i been along this story line

Posted 7 Years Ago


Maybe should be"I'll give you space, I won't make haste." it lets it flow smoother. Nice poem lots of emotion.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Lots of appropriately placed emotion. It flows very nicely.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bonus points for emotion! Poetry is hard, emotion has to be put in; this seems effortless. (which is good)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow. This is great!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sounds like the girl has a experience a really deep lost that is affecting the way she thinks

Posted 7 Years Ago


i think she should forgive u ..

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on June 17, 2012
Last Updated on August 11, 2012
Tags: love, pain, distance, hurt, happyness, anger, mad, sorry, mistake

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Harley (arbiter)
Harley (arbiter)

the age of classic rock , AR



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I am different. I am the unforgiven. I was born october 1997. I just write because I want to express my feelings in more ways than music and art. I'm just a guy trying to get out of the rain and sur.. more..

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