happy memories

I was once new to this world,

 but now years have passed.

 I still reside in the place where I was conceived.

 I have seen things live,

 I have seen things die,

 yet I still stand tall.

 I can see for miles out but its always the same.

Nothing happens here except the blooming of the roses each year.
Except that one year when that nice couple came.

I saw a women proposed to 

right before my very eyes.

More years pass now they're my neighbors.

I watched them live, I watched their children grow.

 When they grew of age, they played with me all day long.

More years pass,

now I only see their graves.

I have lived a long time, I fear my bane is soon.

 Decades pass I finally grow old,

 my time is surely near.

I see the couples graves, happy memories flood back as I slowly decay away.

that is when I asked my last question.

Did they ever think of me the great oak tree...

Author's Note

My third poem I hope you enjoy

Reviews

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

Wow! =D Amazing poem! Being one who loves to sit under old trees, I totally could feel this energy in your words. I think you've captured the soul of the Great Oak in a wonderful way, giving us a joyous moment to share in that long life.

Personally, I would only offer one suggestion. Because the poem is so well put together, i'd leave the last line ending on... "Did they ever think of me?...." That way the poem becomes almost riddle like. =D

Awe-Se-Um!
XO - Kate

[unspoken_hero]

I actually considered multiple endings for the poem, and instead of a mystery ending I went for a surprise ending. Some people figured out what the poem was about but even less didn't that's what I was going for. I appreciate the review, Thanks.

[Empty Spaces]

(round of applause)

[unspoken_hero]

Thanks Im glad you liked it.

[Jem Sagcal]

I honestly did not expect that last line there! I truly enjoyed this write! Amazing work.

[unspoken_hero]

Ha you weren't supposed to, thanks im glad you liked it

[Holly Mason]

so lovely watching his families wanting love
my mother thinks all trees have hearts and feeling when I would climb them she would actually say ...don't dig your shoes in you will hurt the tree...this gave me great appreciation of them love this write
thank you for sharing

[unspoken_hero]

I'm glad you liked it, thanks for the review

[Salar Majak]

I have seen things live,

I have seen things die,

yet I still stand tall.

Damn damn damn damn!!!i knew it was a tree story i just knew!!!!! great ILOVE IT!!!! the ending is amazing! i love this write!
great poem

[unspoken_hero]

Ha most people didn't pick up on that.Thanks for the review im glad you liked it

[Salar Majak]

:)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, I can't say how much you have left me speechless in such awe. This is so wonderful and I can tell how much thought you have put into your poem. Your words are beautiful. While reading your poem, I didn't realize you were referring to an oak tree the whole time until the last sentence. I liked that you didn't come out and say it in the first line. It had me ponder and ponder, and make me want to read the whole poem. Trees are known to be the place where people make most of their happy and most remembered memories. I love how you had many scenes happening at once that I let my imagination soak in. The flow and form of your poem is perfect and you shouldn't change anything about it. After reading your Author's Note, *jaw drops* Only your third poem? Amazing! I remember all of my beginning poems being completely awful, though at that time I thought they were perfect. It's funny how we change as a person and a writer over the years that passed by us so fast. Wonderful job!

Mistakes: These are now edited lines.
Line four-*I have seen things live*
Line seven-* I can see for miles out but it's always the same.*
Line thirteen-*I watched them live, I watched their children grow.*


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG ;)

[unspoken_hero]

You don't even know how much this means to me for you to say that thank you. You fell for what I was trying to portray, I told my self I was going to write about a dying tree but people don't know until the end. In the beginning I meant for it to portray a sense of happiness, a proposal later own children playing, then I meant for it to portray that happiness does not last for ever, the death of the couple. Nature sees the best and worst in us, nature know us best.

Thanks for the for the corrections and review.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're very welcome. I am glad that my review touched you and meant so much to you. I try my best to do so. :) You have unique ideas. I like that!

[unspoken_hero]

After seeing the success of my third poem (yes this is actually my third poem) I will continue to write I have not published any thing for a while because i didn't think my stuff would be good. I will have something new up soon.
Im glad you enjoyed the poem

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh that's wonderful to hear! I look forward to reading more from you :)

[Krista Weiss]

Awww! Great poem! Loved it! :)

[unspoken_hero]

thanks I want to keep writing but im out of ideas any way thanks for the review krista weiss

[Sid]

Well written, despite the sadness for the end to come, you convey the nostalgia of happy memories well. If we think about it nature sees the best and the worst of us, so I guess in that sense nature knows us best (try not to read this line it's me being random). And I have to say this is a good write, keep writing!

[unspoken_hero]

I wanted you to feel a sense of happiness then a sense that happiness does not last for ever. The oak tree was supposed to be a twist while still symbolizing what you said, that nature sees the best and worst in us.
Thanks for your input and im glad you liked it.

[Sid]

You succeeded and it was well worth the read, keep at it!

[unspoken_hero]

Thanks so much ( and I enjoyed your randomness ha) I will try ( do or do not there is no try - Yoda.)To keep writing I havnt posted anything in a while but its coming soon.

[Lino Rie]

great read. I love your use of words.

[unspoken_hero]

Im glad you enjoyed it

[Phillitup]

Happy memories are the best kind of memories and you have captured them eloquently. I love it! Best regards, Dell

[unspoken_hero]

Thanks for the reveiw
Im glad you like it