The Saddest Girl

 I hear you

I hear you crying

In the middle of the night

Wishing you were dying

I wish I could do something

I wish I could say something

But how can I

When you do not know my name?

 

You seem to be falling

Out of the tree

Out of the tree of life

Where you once climbed

And played among the branches

Yet  now you are below and broken

Unimportant to those who once called

Called you sweetheart

I wish I could do something

I wish I could say something

But how can I

When you do not know my name?

 

Reviews

[*Evelen*]

This was a very wonderful poem I really did enjoy it. Well done=)

[qaralynn]

great poem..like it

[The Flawed]

Well, we all have to fall out of that tree some time in our lives,
And we cry about it, shout about it, moan about it and of course write about it.
But important thing is to get up dust yourself off and start climbing again.
You know what they say?
If it doesn’t kill you, it will make you stronger.
But hay, what do I know?
Good job

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

this is really good, i like it very much

[A.T.B.]

I like this piece. It touches on a number of modern day problems - lack of inter-personal connections, despair, the flimsiness of love. You seem to have written this off the cuff; If you revisit it later, you will see there is room for improvment. Minor polishing here and there. But there is substance in it.

[A Wanderer of Dreams]

This is a great poem and I love the tree of life metaphor. So tell me your name :)

[DeathByChoice]

This was a good poem, I really liked "Out of the tree of life... Where you once climbed." I've never thought of it like that. Very creative, but it kind of seems bland to me. It's good, but it seems like it needs more to complete it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem of hope and sadness. Maybe we must introduce our self. Sometime we need to listen and offer friendship. I like this poem. Ending was very good.
Coyote

[deeps]

I really enjoyed reading this write. I thought it was full of amazing emotions. This is a very well written write.

[Holly]

This one holds potential, yea it might need some passion, but I still like it.