Age

Age

A Story by Sofie and the City
"

When life seems so wrong and not going smoothly according to your plans, embrace and acknowledge it. Fix it and stop dwelling. - Sofie Salvador

"

As we grew older each day at a time,

Life is more becoming challenging and fantasies are fading especially

the one's who don't believe it.

 

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I am starting to feel my age right now... An age that makes me wishing to turn back time when I have more games to play and dont have to worry for grace and perfection of winning it... Yes, the age of our Childhood... If I could only hold the hands of time, I'll make things according to my plans... slowly and no flaws. But life is not meant to be that way...

 

These flaws, makes us live stronger and learn from our mistakes...

We are here, for a reason.

I am here for a cause and to make a difference in my own little ways.

 

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Image by Adonis Werther

entitled "Life"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2008 Sofie and the City


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Your youth does not preclude you from writing about age and ageing. You have at an early age grasped the truth that each phase of life passes into the next and that there are always regrets. You perhaps mourn the passing of carefree childhood, simple play and confidence in the infallibility of parents et al. Now you must think of study, career, hard work but still with fun and the forging of friendships, some of which will be for life, some just passing moments. And so on! You are a perceptive thinker and a good observer - both vital assets for a writer. You also say you are meticulous and well organised; also assets - not perhaps vital but very useful. What is very noticable is your ability to reach into people's consciousness as you obviously have into Michael's.
Your problems on the other hand, and I know you are aware of these are grammar and language. You have an excellent vocabulary and your use of and comprehension of words and their meaning is excellent. I would even go so far as to say, there is attractiveness and appeal in some of the eccentricities of your writing, but it is short term. You will have to get it right eventually and you certainly have the capability. Some of your phrases are wondeful; I cite "If I could only hold the hands of time," - beautiful!
My advice at this moment is:
1 - Keep writing!
2 - Concentrate on the declension of verbs and their participles
3 - Read good literature, and don't skim read it - absorb it phrase by phrase; see how great writers do it and seek to emulate (in principle - not style - that should be your own and you already have it).
That's enough for now.
I have done a few things on age and ageing (sadly, not included in the great literature above mentioned) but they may interest you:
An Alfreso Toilette (sonnet and short story).
Sensory Septet - Number 7 - the one with the horrible skeleton.
I don't usually ask people so blatantly to look at my work but there are similarities which may be of interest.
I hope these notes are of help to you. They are kindly meant and are not intended to discourage.
JohnL

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Your youth does not preclude you from writing about age and ageing. You have at an early age grasped the truth that each phase of life passes into the next and that there are always regrets. You perhaps mourn the passing of carefree childhood, simple play and confidence in the infallibility of parents et al. Now you must think of study, career, hard work but still with fun and the forging of friendships, some of which will be for life, some just passing moments. And so on! You are a perceptive thinker and a good observer - both vital assets for a writer. You also say you are meticulous and well organised; also assets - not perhaps vital but very useful. What is very noticable is your ability to reach into people's consciousness as you obviously have into Michael's.
Your problems on the other hand, and I know you are aware of these are grammar and language. You have an excellent vocabulary and your use of and comprehension of words and their meaning is excellent. I would even go so far as to say, there is attractiveness and appeal in some of the eccentricities of your writing, but it is short term. You will have to get it right eventually and you certainly have the capability. Some of your phrases are wondeful; I cite "If I could only hold the hands of time," - beautiful!
My advice at this moment is:
1 - Keep writing!
2 - Concentrate on the declension of verbs and their participles
3 - Read good literature, and don't skim read it - absorb it phrase by phrase; see how great writers do it and seek to emulate (in principle - not style - that should be your own and you already have it).
That's enough for now.
I have done a few things on age and ageing (sadly, not included in the great literature above mentioned) but they may interest you:
An Alfreso Toilette (sonnet and short story).
Sensory Septet - Number 7 - the one with the horrible skeleton.
I don't usually ask people so blatantly to look at my work but there are similarities which may be of interest.
I hope these notes are of help to you. They are kindly meant and are not intended to discourage.
JohnL

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are indeed making a difference in your own little way for your words have touched my soul and inspired my spirit. Live your dream for yours is the soul of a writer. The nature of creativity is such that awakens us into oneness as we journey to the beloved. Thank you for sharing your gift. You are blessed.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sofie and the City

Quezon City, Philippines, Philippines



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MORE than meets the eye. Writing is my passion... the space where I can breathe freely and be my self. I am not a Pro in Writing, but hoping to make a difference in one's life. I fell in love in th.. more..

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