tainted window

tainted window

A Poem by RJ620Win

Bruised, wounded, yet reserved
To what do I owe such platonic visions?
Be if the obscurity of the familiar,
Or of the peril of the unknown

Strips of unwanted fantasies,
Clusters of the forgone realities,
Clinging to what may have been
Of a glimpse of the untangled velvet strokes

I stand, I stare... it snaps!
The twist of the kaleidoscope is sealed!
To snatch such illusions cannot be conceded,
But to this day, it is yet to be revealed.

Thy image is my council of thought.
Now, to what do I owe such lucid visions?
Th thee, and be no one else.
This tainted window needs to be shattered to heal.

© 2010 RJ620Win


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I like this... Really makes me think...

Posted 8 Years Ago


cheka!!ga nosebleed ko..bwahaha!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like the metaphor a lot.

Posted 8 Years Ago


i didn't really understand this very much and my head herts from trying


70/100 for giving me a headace

Posted 8 Years Ago


I didn't understand this poem at all. The third, eighth, and fifteenth lines don't make sense because of poor wording or misspellings. There doesn't seem to be any kind of path. It lacks structure and cleanliness and has lost it's meaning because of it. Try writing the essential meaning of this poem and rewriting it from that.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is very unique.....Like one of a kind....To me it wasn't confusing because it seems like something I can relate to.....So really very nice job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


I agree that it's a little confusing, but I liked the wording anyhow. It's very creative and unique.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is deep, yet it confused me a little, I read it again to understand it a little better, but all in all it's good.

Posted 8 Years Ago


im srry not ot be mean or anything but u toatly lost me

Posted 8 Years Ago


We truly learn lessons from the past, it brings changes good or bad. It continuously haunt us that it could influence our thought, our ideas, our choices, decisions and everything unmentioned. The good thing is that we could turn the table to let the bad past into our benefit, to take counsel from it and be strong, it will guide us into future that we will not make the same moments of mistakes again.

Furthermore, the trauma s overwhelming that we need to shatter the windows to keep the view of the future clear enough for us to see.

Keep on writing please!
I got to learn a lot from you.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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RJ620Win
RJ620Win

Dipolog City, region IX, Philippines



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I am no one....nothing special; just a common guy with common thoughts and principles. I've lived and led a common life but remarkable. There are no monuments dedicated to me and my name will soon be .. more..

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HOW I WISH HOW I WISH

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