Don't treasure me so much....

Don't treasure me so much....

A Poem by vaishnavi

don't treasure me so much
that like the treasure lost in the woods
i will be lost forever

don't treasure me so much
that like the treasure caged inside a box
i will be caged
but make me a free bird
that could fly high above the sky

don't treasure me so much
that like every treasure
 all bad spirits will come to find me
but make me the ocean which could swallow everything

dont make me the treasure
which is so deep
but make me the sky
where infinity would like to reach
i wish to set me so high
where no one could get me...


© 2014 vaishnavi


Author's Note

vaishnavi
DON'T BE A TREASURE FOR WHICH THESE DIFFICULTIES ARE.... BUT BE THE ONE PRECIOUS GEM OF ONES HEART WHICH COULD NOT BE SOLD NOR CAN BE ROBBED NEITHER IT CAN BE REMOVED FROM ITS PLACE
BECAUSE YOU ARE MORE VALUABLE THAN A TREASURE

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your writing is really different, and i like the idea of the poem..well donee! keep going xxxx

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks for such lovely review :)
throughout its very cativating. its a wonderful read. welldone

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks eve for this gr8 review
vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks eve for this gr8 review
vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

actually sorry for this much lot of reviews my internet connection is running slow now a days so the.. read more
don't treasure me so much
that like every treasure
all bad spirits will come to find me
but make me the ocean which could swallow
everything.

Great lines dear friend. I like your thought and you must fly.

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks for this review
Really splendid poetry Vaish.I really loved your lines :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks Vidya for this lovely words
glad u liked it
Vidya Bacchus

6 Years Ago

I did.You are welcome :)
very well written. I love it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks
glad u love it
i really appreciate ur reviews
This one is great. If you love me let me go, i will come back.

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks for reading and liking it :)
This is one of my favs of yours!

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

glad it is your favorite and glad again that u like my poems :)
keep on reading
I love this poem! I like you lay out of it! Keep it up!

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks Emily for reviewing so gr8 :)
Lovely poem.. Very beautifully crafted. God has made everybody with a purpose but we do wish to be a certain way. We expect people to treat us like the bird or the sky or the ocean, instead the ones who love us become way too possesive and treat us like the treasure. Heart touching :D

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks for this lovely review
glad u liked it :)
beautiful piece..something different..
Keep up the good work :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


vaishnavi

6 Years Ago

thanks Anahat for motivating me to work better
Anahat

6 Years Ago

your welcome :)

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