Wonderful

my first happy sorta feel good poem

Hello wonderful.
The sky is cloudy today.
I'll wake you up with pleasure,
Hoping that you will stay.

Can we go for a walk?
Side by side.
Would we share our deepest thoughts?
Stride by stride.

I know sometimes,
we feel so empty.
Our minds begging for reality.
But the reliability of bliss is too much.

I don't expect forever.
Or even more than five minuets.
All i want to have is your gaze.
The feeling of your affection conflicted in haze.

Good morning wonderful.
Its a beautiful day.

Author's Note

Ok so this was my attempt at a happy slash feel good poem. Did i totally bomb my attempt or was it ok? all comments are welcome ^_^

Reviews

[indieRokker]

Well hello beautiful, this was great, had a good feel and rhythm to it. You did good in this on, and nah, no bombings at all. It fell together perfectly, like a sweet serenade. Nicely written pal,

indie♥

[Valentine]

This one I like..Nice going kiddo..lol and God bless..Valentien

[Aradie Rain]

It was sweet, happy, go lucky. Seems like somthing people would want in their lives.
~Aradie

[*Evelen*]

No bombing what so ever lol this was a very great piece. You nailed a happy slash feel good poem. It made me smile the whole time I was reading it. Well done.

[AllyKinzz:)]

No bombing here. It was great. You are good at putting some emotion into your pieces. great work. Loved it. :D

[Jacqueline Lopez]

Oh! my God that's beautiful!

[Micah_s5]

I started reading it. Was like whoa, it's a happy one and it works well.. Kinda scary bro, lol jk. Good job.

[snapstache]

I love it!
I=You write really good happy poems, I was smiling!
Very sweet!
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[Taylor H.]

loved it! you need to write happy more often, if you write one feeling all the time your work comes off realther repetiivte and 2D. But this was great

[Raven Radke]

awww!! this made me smile! i can actually imagine the scenery and two people walking side by side lovely very lovely!!!
i absoluetly adored it! keep it up!!