Wonderful

Wonderful

A Poem by Matt
"

my first happy sorta feel good poem

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Hello wonderful.
The sky is cloudy today.
I'll wake you up with pleasure,
Hoping that you will stay.

Can we go for a walk?
Side by side.
Would we share our deepest thoughts?
Stride by stride.

I know sometimes,
we feel so empty.
Our minds begging for reality.
But the reliability of bliss is too much.

I don't expect forever.
Or even more than five minuets.
All i want to have is your gaze.
The feeling of your affection conflicted in haze.

Good morning wonderful.
Its a beautiful day.

© 2010 Matt


Author's Note

Matt
Ok so this was my attempt at a happy slash feel good poem. Did i totally bomb my attempt or was it ok? all comments are welcome ^_^

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Well hello beautiful, this was great, had a good feel and rhythm to it. You did good in this on, and nah, no bombings at all. It fell together perfectly, like a sweet serenade. Nicely written pal,

indie♥

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one I like..Nice going kiddo..lol and God bless..Valentien

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It was sweet, happy, go lucky. Seems like somthing people would want in their lives.
~Aradie

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

No bombing what so ever lol this was a very great piece. You nailed a happy slash feel good poem. It made me smile the whole time I was reading it. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

No bombing here. It was great. You are good at putting some emotion into your pieces. great work. Loved it. :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh! my God that's beautiful!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I started reading it. Was like whoa, it's a happy one and it works well.. Kinda scary bro, lol jk. Good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it!
I=You write really good happy poems, I was smiling!
Very sweet!
*.*

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

loved it! you need to write happy more often, if you write one feeling all the time your work comes off realther repetiivte and 2D. But this was great

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awww!! this made me smile! i can actually imagine the scenery and two people walking side by side lovely very lovely!!!
i absoluetly adored it! keep it up!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 14, 2010
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Fort Worth, TX



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