I tried to save the world

Sweet lulabies of our broken memories.

Replay the chorus like its our last words.

Keep me tonight because i have no home.

too many scars have become unsown.

 

Follow me into the unknown.

Anxiety turns me into nothing,

Like a birds nest falling.

The death of the innocent,

breathe along with the ones I hate to love.

 

Dust fills my lungs,

as the strains of selfishness compress my chest.

As my eyes turn red in the back of my head.

I just can't cope with anything anymore.

 

Be strong for those who can't.

Breathe for those who have lost the will.

Dream for the lost ones.

And Smoke one more to make this easier.

 

Save the world lose the girl.

Save the girl let the world fall.

Reason and regret help me foreget.

 

Keep me inside your heart.

Close to our memories.

When things wern't so broken.

 

Share one last moment.

Breathe one last time.

Because this time im falling.

 

Bear the worlds sorrows.

An aching heart.

A broken will.

Bleeding eyes remind me.

 

I'm only still alive.

 

Author's Note

All reviews are welcome.. its been a rough week.. also the poetry art is actualy a pitcture i took on my phone one morning last summer.

Reviews

[<3 Simply Rebekah <3]

Love the pic BTW,
WOW I really loved this poem...
"Sweet lulabies of our broken memories.
Replay the chorus like its our last words.
Keep me tonight because i have no home.
too many scars have become unsown."
nice start...
and I also liked the lines
"The death of the innocent,
breathe along with the ones I hate to love."
I can almost completely relate to this poem,
I see in ur note things have been rough,
I hope they get better for you man.
Great poem
It's for sure a keeper!

[Living Proof.]

Lovelovelove this.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought this was very good. I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Daydreamer54]

Wow, this was deep and beautiful! i really liked it! I guess we can't completly save everyone in this workd from walking on a broken path, but we can at least try helping one person righ? That'll make all the diffrence. ^^ Great write1

[Mr. Darkblood]

hmm...not sure how this is about saving the world, but I thought it was great, the words flowed well and the lines themselves were depressingly beautiful.

btw: "lulabies" is spelled wrong, it should be "lullabies"

[Taylor H.]

This is a great peom. I hope your week gets better

[Jennika has a short att..]

Okay so on the 6th stanza thingy last line, it says "When things wern't so broken" Was wern't supposed to be weren't? That's what bothered me, also a couple other words looked like they were misspelled, I dunno if they are or not seeing as how I see stuff that isn't really there. I know my reviews aren't really helping, but hey I can't help that, and at least it gives you something to read(:

Speaking of reading, I don't like waiting for awesome poetry, I actually think I understand you poetry in a different sense than other's. I also feel what you're writing so don't leave me outta the people you read request.
NykkiC

[Micah_s5]

Good creative write. Some good wording, some odd wording. Doesn't disappoint.