Phoenix

We should not let life trample us underfoot but be strong and rise from the ash.

           Phoenix

Gathering stormclouds portent,
A coming rite of passage,
A trial ,where the decks are stacked against me,
But I have never ,worn the mantle of a coward.

And taken refuge amidst its seductive folds.

 

Life has tossed me down,
Countless times daring me to yield,
But I ,with stubborn refusal,
Rose again and again,
Like a phoenix from the ash.

 

Reckless in my quest ,
To prove myself ,
In a world that allows no quarter,
And takes no prisoners,
I refuse to falter ,though my feet are weary.

 

My nails are torn and broken,
From clawing my way ,
Out of my humdrum existence,
Tears my only allowance,
Shed in the shadows away from knowing eyes.

 

Emotion, a tool to bring us to heel,
Love, the best thing that ever happened to us,

Like a double edged sword,is the most crippling,

Tempting fate I throw down the gauntlet,
Who will best the other?

 

I seek counsel from the elders,
Those who have staked their claim
On this thing called life,
That will teach us to bend,
Or force us to break.

Author's Note

I think life is fill of adversary,but we need to try at least to rise above it.So in the end we will not be filled with regret.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Emotion, a tool to bring us to heel,
Love, the best thing that ever happened to us,

Like a double edged sword,is the most crippling,

Tempting fate I throw down the gauntlet,"

I like the analogy of the Phoenix and how we should rise after failures and burned out emotions...Bravo

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you sami your words as usual encourage me a lot:)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:).................

[Rogie-Dodge]

Fight the good fight !!
Inspiring stuff

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes we should fight.Thank you Rogie-Dogie:)

[ron]

You will never break. You are the Phoenix that life could never keep down. You will rise each time stronger than before.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I hope so.Life has a way of pounding you into the ground .Thank you for reading and your words mean a lot:P

[ron]

You are most welcome :P

[Daniel Sala]

Great poem, Vidya, nice verses containing beautiful descriptions, where strength of mind/will and not giving up are a constant theme, a very positive piece of poetry, a pleasure to read.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You gopher you!!!!!!You have come up for air I see lol.Thank you as ever daniel your words always make me feel warm and fuzzy:)

[Daniel Sala]

It's a real pleasure to read your poems, as ever...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you again:)

[Penny]

A story of struggle. Very nyc poem.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you penny:)

[Penny]

Ur welcum.

[Castalia]

I like the concept/visual of a mantle of cowardice

If you break the line after never in the 4th line - and start worn on the following line it would put more emphasis on the word never - like this
But I have never
worn the mantle of a coward.

See how it flows?

In a writing class I took once the teacher suggested that you try writing the poem as prose first - paragraphs and then break the lines up and read them out loud. Even free verse has a rhythm. Read it out loud and watch it flow. It was good practice to go to open poetry readings and read my poetry, you get a real feel for how that word flow can happen.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Would you believe I had it exactly like that but I wanted to fit the last line in to make it 5 lines instead of 6 ,So that is how that happened.Thank you for your most encouraging review.It is most appreciated and welcome:)

[Praveeta]

An inspirational poem about life's challenges from a talented poet.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much sweet friend for your kind words:)

[Praveeta]

You are most welcome. :)

[genocide]

you're a very good writer hon

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much:)

[Joiedevivre]

yes, gritty and strong you surge to reassert and redefine your boundaries. Nice!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much.We should always go down swinging I think:)

[Joiedevivre]

i absolutely agree, you know my pen name is Phoenics! x

[Vidya Bacchus]

I did know that and it is absolutely fitting:D

[Vidya Bacchus]

You rise so beautiful above it my friend. I think there is a way with your words, I adore, just a great fantasy, mixed with reality, and mythology. Just beautiful poetry. Strong, yes, strong you are, and this is...

- Elisa

[Vidya Bacchus]

Awwww thank you so much, vista is most appreciative of your lovely words lol

Hahahahah lol, I will call you by now VidyaVista :D lol xx

[Vidya Bacchus]

That actually has quite a ring to it.lol

Yeah, don't you think? lol, it's a cool one :D:D

[Vidya Bacchus]

LOL...............:)