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In a line

In a line

A Poem by Vine_spinner
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For "In a Line" contest. This is my first piece of writing since I step into wristerscafe.

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Watching my foot stepping out this door, into the room where I will find another door to open.

© 2013 Vine_spinner


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I like the idea behind this line. It's very hopeful and poetic. The structure is pretty good, too. I always like to try and make a suggestion in all of my reviews, and for you I was wondering if you could condense it more. "Watching my foot stepping out this door, only to find another," or "where I will find another," or "into a room with yet another." I like the first suggestion the best, but you get my idea. Very good, I enjoyed it a lot.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vine_spinner

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind comments. Wish to learn more from you in the future!



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I like the idea behind this line. It's very hopeful and poetic. The structure is pretty good, too. I always like to try and make a suggestion in all of my reviews, and for you I was wondering if you could condense it more. "Watching my foot stepping out this door, only to find another," or "where I will find another," or "into a room with yet another." I like the first suggestion the best, but you get my idea. Very good, I enjoyed it a lot.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vine_spinner

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind comments. Wish to learn more from you in the future!
I think this is a very appropriate first piece of writing. I really enjoyed the meaning that was in it. I wish you luck on your Writerscafe journey, and welcome.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vine_spinner

6 Years Ago

Thank you!

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Added on August 18, 2013
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Vine_spinner
Vine_spinner

Hong Kong



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I'm a 14 years old city girl who loves nature. Honestly I don't speak English well, and my writing skills aren't good. Just that I have lots of thoughts and wonders that I want to express. That's why .. more..