Neither Here Nor There

About my scattered family

You live there

I live here

Our son lives everywhere

Our daughter lives in her head

 

You make money

I mend fences

There is a vast chasm

Between where we live

 

You believe in logic

I believe

Logic crushes dreams

Dead dreams kills souls

 

How did we get here?

This vast space

Between us

The hole within us

 

 

 

Reviews

[Coltron]

"Dead dreams kills souls" - nice alliteration there.

You did a great job of tying two important themes together - that of the distance between us, and that of the distance between the way you and Dad view things. Structurally speaking, it's great the way you move between the two themes. Often in poetry, there is a turn, or "volta," where the poem takes a, well, turn to a new idea. Here, I guess the turn comes after the second stanza.

I also think the question you concluded with fits rather nicely.

[rosyfury]

I really like this. Makes one wonder about the nature of matters other than their own.

[Angel's Lady]

You painted a very clear picture, using so few words, wielding your keystrokes like a master artist.

Great write! Touching, poignant, and very beautifully written. Good job.

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

sometimes i too feel like i am neither here, nor there...

great job!! you really let us know how it was to be neither here nor there.....

~may

[ac31595]

i think this is a very good piece of writing i like it! alot dont quit writing cause ur an awsome writer

[Courtney26]

This poem is very heart felt because I can totally relate to and read wht u feel in this poem!

[Poetic Injustice]

I like both the simplicity and (upon closer inspection) the complexity of this piece. It painted a clear picture my heart related to.

[Al]

In sixteen lines, you allowed us to see your pain! In sixteen lines you allowed us all to see your life! That is amazing!