Looking Beyond

Looking Beyond

A Poem by Rania
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There is light beyond life and hope beyond death

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When someone we love leaves us 
To transcend the starry skies
We feel the world has ended
The dark night reverberates with our cries
We could end it ourselves; 
We could break all worldly ties
It is at such times that we should remember
To open our tear-dimmed eyes
To look beyond our grief 
To reach out to those who still need us
For this is where the beauty of creation lies
In knowing that love never dies
It just changes form and shape 
To be with us again in the eternity of time
Leaving no room for grief and goodbyes

© 2013 Rania


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Rania
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Rania,
loved your poem, how beautifully u have described the reality of life, loved this line especially 'In knowing that love never dies, It just changes form and shape'. this is so true. sometimes i feel that love should be only in form, so that no complications should be there , but then thats how life teaches us, the different but beautiful shades of life.
thank u for sharing your beautiful work,
Prandya

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

Your thoughts are lovely Pradnya. Yes love is best formless and with no barriers of physical complex.. read more
Pradnya

4 Months Ago

Pleasure is all mine Rania, thank u for showering me with such lovely words. Every appreciation mean.. read more
Rania

4 Months Ago

You’re welcome dear Pradnya 😊



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having lost my mother recently … these words have something of an uplifting feel to them.. and I thank you for them

Neville

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

3 Months Ago

You’re welcome Neville. It’s wonderful my words could help. I hope you’re well and safe ❤️
As a person living with constant all-over pain the past 20 years, I can attest that doing for others is the best way to jerk ourselves from the natural human tendency for self-pity. I love your message, when many say we should not put demands on someone who's grieving, just let that person be as miserable as they might be for as long as it grief goes. As for helpful suggestions . . . line 4 strays from your usual uniform rhythm & it would be easy to trim a few syllables so all your lines are more "even" . . . similarly with line 11, which contains too many non-essential words: "at such times let's remember" . . . for me, "we should remember" is not a persuasive thing to say, it sounds preachy, if you say "let's remember" it sounds more inclusive rather than telling people what SHOULD be done (I hate the word "should" -- even wrote a poem about it years ago, how dumb to have the gall to say what should be done by everyone!) Normally, I'm okay with everything you write & this poem doesn't need to be changed. But I saw your authors note & decided to tell you what I'm really thinking, even as I accept your poem the way it is (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts my dearest friend ❤️
This was really sad but there was also that bit of hope in it. Grief can be such a hard thing but they've never entirely gone and there can be happiness beyond it. Your poem really good and captured a lot in it.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Rania

4 Months Ago

Thank you so very much for reading and reviewing.
Loss is indeed very painful. But the love we lose follows the law of conservation and always rebounds in another form, of course. So there is no point in sinking in grief. And this very sentiment is expressed so exquisitely in your verses. A very natural rhythm marks your poem. Loved it.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

Thank you Ayesha. Yeah, looking ahead is all about life. Thank you for the lovely review.
Beautiful sentiment expressed here. Our loved ones may leave us, but their love doesn't. That stays behind and that is a great comfort to us, plus our memories when we go through the heartache of grief in all its stages. Very nicely conveyed lines Rania.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


I opened this one to read it first because I'm a person who always seek "the beyond" and "the more". and I was right to read it first, because it feeds my poetic taste with its delightful simplicity and rich thoughts, one of the hardest and most painful things one can experience is to lose a loved one, whether to death or by letting go, still with an opened heart, awareness and strength, these tough experience evolve us into a more spiritual and higher beings. the last lines of Your poem from "For this is where the beauty of creation lies..." until the end are totally amazing and powerful. Thank Yo my dear for sharing Your wisdom and kindness.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

And creation is always beautiful in replacing those we lose. Giving us new friends and loved ones to.. read more
This is really sad for a Monday.
When I was dragged to church as a kid, death was always the journey to somewhere better. Though it was usually shouted out just to make sure you believed it. I never believed it myself, maybe because grief never makes you feel better. Life does go on and the living still keep you going.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

Yeah Paul. Life is a powerful moving force. Thanks for reviewing.
an especially well done piece
The pain of losing can sometimes overwhelm but there is more out there
BTW I didn't realize you were from Daressalaam, so visiting your site is almost like a mini-holiday
Do U have a pet camel??
no!
A wild one??
No!
Just asking
Have a lovely day

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

Lol no pet camel yet Dave. This ain’t the Sahara. It’s East Africa. We’re old settlers here. D.. read more
Dave Brown

4 Months Ago

Just being foolish, I doubt I'll ever get to buy ice-cream as I tour through the Ngorongoro National.. read more
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A beautiful message here, dear Rania! Death is such a traumatic part of our life's journey. We know it is inevitable but that still never prepares us for when the moment arrives. By clinging to hope that life will go on beyond our period of mourning we can help ourselves overcome our grief. A wonderful train of thought here, and written in a lovely flow of rhyme. Well done, girl!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

Thank you Jamila. Not poetry as fine as yours, friend. Yet you inspire.
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Gee
Lost my mum last April so can relate to this. A mothers love is irreplaceable as it is all consuming, forgiving, unconditional, losing it leaves an aching pain that dulls with time but never really goes away.
Again enjoyed reading you ma'am :))

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania

4 Months Ago

A mother’s love is irreplaceable. Her empty chair can never be filled. I’m very sad for your los.. read more
Gee

4 Months Ago

Nae problem :)

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