As A River I Flow

Happy International Women’s Day!

As a river, I ripple and flow
The sun and moon give me my glow
Rushing, rolling under the stars
Revved by venus, ruled by mars

For some, I am a hymnal pure
For some, i am sin and allure
To those who thirst, i am divine
Of chastity, I am a sign

Spit on me or hurl an impurity
I’ll keep twinkling in all my purity
With perfect joy, i’ll make my path
I’ll trundle on in bliss or wrath

Don’t panic at my plunges steep
Just trust in me, my waters deep
Dont grudge me my hypnotic motion
Just swim with me, until the ocean

And if you brave my twists and bends
I’ll keep my promise till the end
My quest is noble, right and free
My course is love, just run with me

Author's Note

A tribute to all the beautiful, brave and wonderful women on the Café and out there who make this life worth living!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Very cool poem, strong rhyme & rhythm! I love that you're commemorating a day (I wasn't aware of) & yet your poem has such universal appeal, I quickly forgot msg was about a certain day. As I read, I was on parallel tracks, one being some woman (any woman) as a narrator exclaiming herself to the world, what I am . . . and also being a msg about the totality of women, what WE are. I love the topsy-turvy imagery you use, taken from rivers with twists & rock tumbles & splashes, as if embracing the "reputation" women in general may have as being tumultuous, & portraying it as an attribute worth enduring & with the promise of even more awesomeness possible. Even if you took this out of the realm of women, it's a rousing message of positivity for anyone reclaiming ownership over one's humanness & humanity (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Rania M]

Thank you for such amazingly lovely words of love and support, dear Margie. As I said before, you are a beacon of hope for many of us who read you and draw courage and inspiration from your poetry and your life. You enrich our lives more than you can ever imagine.
So here’s to us all! Cheers!

[Ada]

You do a nice job defining what woman is by using nature as a metaphor...you also do a nice job rhyming which can often times seem elementary. Kudos!

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'As A River I flow'
Rania,
'Spit on me or hurl an impurity
I'll keep twinkling in all my purity
With perfect joy I'll make my path
I'll trundle on in bliss or wrath'
The above is just an example of the
essence of what life can be- whether
man or woman, boy or girl.
I noticed this is written for 'International
Woman's Day.' That is wonderful to hear.
I do not think Iv'e read any of your work
before so this was really fun! It was a joy
to read, to find concepts, ideas which
I can understand and identify with such
as in this poem. Bless you in writing and
in life.
Kathy

[Patricia Wedel]

Women who bloom like a Dahlia where sun and rain
are their domain... can bear many flowers to scatter her
philosophies to the brave and true. She can be blue or
shades of rose with a touch of melancholy. She sings of
many things like golden wedding bands where fingers tally
in lustful songs and she now belongs to the Meadow Lark. gently, Pat

[Relic]

This is a great tribute my friend. Wisdom as well as a different point of view from women are what helps the cafe's river flow.

[emipoemi]

How did I miss this gorgeous gem? I need a moment. Your bar is still where I said it was, and no marks are being docked here since this poem preceded the bar, but holy freaking kwap this is divine right to the very last line. You don't need a number of interplaced commas, and the "impurity/purity" rhyme was a bit of a cheat, but *chef's kiss* - golden!! Well done!

[Rania M]

The punctuation thing always confuses me. To do or not to do. Now that you mentioned it, I can relax a bit :)
I’m aware of the purity/impurity line :) I’ll fix it if I find something suitable. I’m super-impatient sometimes. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem.
Thank you emipoemi. Stay safe!

[emipoemi]

think of the comma as a breath. if the thought continues, but can stand alone as two separate parts, add the comma. But if it's the same continuous thought that can't stand alone as two or more parts, don't add the comma. Keep at it.

[Rania M]

Of course, I’m sure it keeps getting better with time. Thank you for your lovely tips. ❤️

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Katrina Mckeown]

Indeed our waters do run deep Rania and you are one of those beautiful women. Lovely dedication with great rhymes and rhythm , “my course is love just run with me” . A very uplifting poem with wonderful imagery..
Kind regards Katrina

[Rania M]

It’s amazing how deep and how beautiful our existence.
Thank you very much dear Katrina!

[emmajoy]

' Don’t panic at my plunges steep - Just trust in me, my waters deep - Dont grudge me my hypnotic motion - Just swim with me, until the ocean ' That really is a flowing stream of 'WHO I AM'

What an anthem you've sung! Think you've covered so many characteristics women have, shown their strengths, displayed still to be sorted needs bu, yet nearer than ever imagined. Think one thing we should all remember, whether man or woman, that giving birth shows the greatest hurdle, effort and most times joy. Without women, '.. there would be no need for seed.. ' as a brave woman once said during a speech!

[Rania M]

Dear EmmaJoy,

You said it so beautifully! Without women there would be no need for seed. How deep and bountiful their existence! Women are pivotal, their strength is unimaginable.
Thank you for such a lovely review on this poem.
Much love,
Rania

[Miss Sharon]

(My quest is noble, right and free My course is love, just run with me) What a beautiful closure to this amazing poem! I felt as though I were there with you observing the flow of the river. Wonderful poetry my friend. ~Sharon

[Rania M]

Thank you Miss Sharon for such a lovely review!

[Fran Marie]

Our waters do
run deep it's true
even with our twists
and bends..women
do endure until the end
Perhaps we're stronger
then given credit for
what a great tribute
for IWD

nice w ork.. Rania

[Rania M]

Thank you so much for visiting this poem, lovely friend Fran.