Sunlit Morn

Sunlit Morn

A Poem by Rania M

Swift swords of serrated morning rays
Rush to proclaim the royal rise of a day
Slashed, the shrinking veil of the night
Frayed ink ribbons, wither away in the light

The sky, a washed blue rippling stream
Scrubbed, the aftertaste of a dream
Darkness crumbles to dust, in one woeful swoop
Grey sentinels topple, failing to recoup

In a blinding spell, without a fair warning
Charges in a flashy, sunlit morning
Slaying with mirth, my solemn shadows
I’ll beseech the dusk, her reign to overthrow

© 2020 Rania M


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Rania M
Just writing. Trying.

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This poem is packed full of everything I love to see, but without it feeling a bit crowded by this . . . rhyme, rhythm, alliteration, dynamic verbs, popping imagery! The thing that makes your writing POP the most is your use of lively expressive verbs . . . slashed, shrinking, frayed, scrubbed, crumbles, charges . . . and on & on you go! This really makes writing come alive! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie! I feel I’m doing much better with the rhyming and creative part since we discuss.. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

I feel honored to watch you grow! *smile*



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WOW! This is so very good. Love the imagery you write with. Awesome writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


that is the image of how I am longing to see in the end of this outbreak of a very long night I keep trying to think of the time when the sun will dawn thru the pall of this virus and we can all walk out again without fear:) nice form and flow Rania:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


wow ... bold and fierce you paint the dawn .. ever so well says i! the slashing, shredding ..."..ink ribbons" ... so cool! love the consonance and rhyming .. funny how we get comfortable in the dusk and nighttime .. shadows can dull the pain ... that's how i take your closing lines .. its a surprise after the inspiration of dawn and daylight .. but i may be seeing that wrong ... if so .. then the "her" refers to the coming night and your speaker wants to stay out to the darkness .. hmmmmmmmmmm ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Trying is good - it lets the "you" out. Here it IS morning - though the dark BEFORE sun's rise. Coffee mysts rise and expand into ...dreams.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Rania M

1 Year Ago

Sounds awesome. The most wonderful time of the day! And the first coffee makes it divine!
Tha.. read more
I liked the poem. Myself I like the dawn and the dust. The dawn, we can watch the sun rise and the day rebirth. The dust, maybe coffee, maybe wine and waiting for the moon. I liked the honest thoughts leading to the strong ending. Thank you Rania for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

Thank you for such a great and imaginative review! I just love the images you evoked in my mind with.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

A wonderful poem and you are welcome dear Rania.
I'm a night owl myself
but I do enjoy the way
the sun is so forcefully
displayed here..your
descriptive words of its
glorious power to chase
to haunting shadows..
yet the evening moon presents
the other side of the coin with
Its sheer magic and mysterious
glow ..we need both.day and night
to balance the nature of all things

well written piece here..Rania



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much dear Fran. Stay safe. God bless you!
  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

you re s o. welcome
and do take care
Such fine meter set inside and around such wonderfully visual language. Rania. You're not merely 'trying' but instinctively - a very creative and subtle poet,

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

A basic love for poetry and a sense of where I’m going helps. As does my thesaurus and a lovely rh.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

Promise you, there's quite a few poet/writers whose confidence comes and goes! You're inspired by.. read more
How old are you? Pardon the question. But you write like an experienced professional, and I feel humbled. But perhaps talent outweighed experience......? No doubt! I think I'll stick to stories. Lol.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

Aww this isn’t such a great piece..?
I wondered about it really. Not so young at almost thi.. read more
Frankie

1 Year Ago

Well I think your writing is very good. I read a lot here but only Leave a few reviews since I thi.. read more
This poem is packed full of everything I love to see, but without it feeling a bit crowded by this . . . rhyme, rhythm, alliteration, dynamic verbs, popping imagery! The thing that makes your writing POP the most is your use of lively expressive verbs . . . slashed, shrinking, frayed, scrubbed, crumbles, charges . . . and on & on you go! This really makes writing come alive! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie! I feel I’m doing much better with the rhyming and creative part since we discuss.. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

I feel honored to watch you grow! *smile*
This is a story and description of the night and day you've captured so well, bringing them to life in ways I never could.

Excellent poem, Rania.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rania M

1 Year Ago

Aww...my friend...thanks but I’m humbled so much. I’m learning from yous! ❤️

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