Insomnia

I sit here alone tired and weary
in the dark feeling dreary

boredom races through my head
oh how i would like to be asleep in bed

If only insomnia hadnt set in
tucked under covers is where i could have been

My body is weak and begs to rest
but unfortunately my mind is obsessed


I force my eyes shut to escape this place
but visions of being awake i cannot erase

I try and try with all my might
but there will be no sleep for me not tonight

Reviews

[BABSIE BEE]

Haaaa. Been there soooo many times. Thanks for describing exactly how it feels to be up through the night and soooo longing to be tucked up in dreamland. Good wee piece.
Babs xx

[DarkAngelWriter]

Way awesome. These are some of my exact thoughts when I'm trying to go to sleep at night (key word: trying). You're a very talented writer. I'm so glad I'm getting to read your work! =D

[Brette Medb]

I think almost everyone who writes understands this feeling, where the mind is racing but the body is just so tired. It was almost like a stream of consciousness .... great write.


Brette

[Requiem]

One that I can absolutely relate to. Especially right now, when I'm supposed to be sleeping. I have to say good rhyming poets are far and in between. I only know about two poets who are awesome at it. You did a wonderful job with the flow, too. Thanks for entering my 'tired' contest and good luck to you!

[Imperfection]

I can certainly relate to this one. In fact, I have a poem on this too.


I force my eyes shut to escape this place

But visions of being awake I cannot erase

Very familiar feeling.
Well written.

[nokturnal]

Great write loved the way it flowed I unfortunately don't have this problem so I can't say I relate if you could write one about narcolepsy then we could talk...lol keep writing these amazing poems

[Kathryn]

Oh wow; EXACTLY how I was feeling last night when I wrote a bunch of stuff... I sometimes think it's easier to do your best work when you're that tired; you have a loser leash on emotion and verses run freely and randomly but end up being the best because you put more emotion into it.
I love how you wrote this though; I can totally relate and it makes me tired just thinking about it again! Great work!
Oh, and good luck in the contest. ;D

[Charlotte Rose]

Very good write. And oh how I can relate to this. Great job

[Lydia Shutter]

A poem many poets will identify with and understand. Very well written. Good luck in the contest. Lydia