Hidden Danger

Crouched beneath the high grass
A gleaming stare peers out
scanning the horizon
planning its move no doubt

In the distance a gazelle roams free
unaware of its impending danger
its every move through the field
gazed upon by a stranger

Anticipation builds
in the predator viewing its prey
he cannot take it any longer
before him sits a buffet

With a leap and a turn
the lion reveals his intent
the gazelle frozen in place
its feet poured in cement

With a ferocious chomp
its neck gushes red
once a vibrant being
now lays dead

Reviews

[jayfray]

I like this poem. It has some William Blake qualities to it. It made me think of his poem The Tyger... Good work!

[Kimberly Smith]

NICE

[Kathryn]

Oh, wow, um... wow. REALLY good, excellent, even, but... oh wow. lol! ♥ (Ugh! why must i have sympathetic pain???) lol! :D

[George Love]

Must have been watching National Geographic when you wrote this one! Very vivid and well done!!

[NJ Schneider]

I really, really enjoyed reading this. I don't normally like rhyming but small one like this add something to the poem to catching your minds attention. Really awesome piece of work!

[DarkAngelWriter]

Holy s**t. Very nice. You describe it so vividly... Is you'se a lion?

[mattavelli]

You killed Bambi!!!
This is a great visual poem.

[Aleirah]

You captured the cycle of the food chain very well! For one to survive it must take from another.

[Charlotte Rose]

This is a very good write.. The visual that I got from this was really good as well.. GREAT WRITE!!

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow, this one is powerful. The imagery is incredible, Josh! The build up of intensity was marvelous! Great work. Lydia