i miss you

i miss you

A Poem by Killer
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sad lonly

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I am alone in this room

Hiding in a cornor

I feel that i am doomed

Can't take it anymore

I need you here or else i'll die alone

 

Don't forget I'm only a person

What could I do?

Bleeding my blood fell to the floor ,But Who?

Forever Known

As The one who died and cried

© 2010 Killer


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I really like short poems for though they have less words but they still manage to spell the magic on readers...Apart from some spelling mistakes this one is really good!! with such a few words you were quite successful in pouring out your heart... good write :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very dark and mysterious Killer, as what is "Forever Known" remains unkown to the reader, yet the lonliness and pain come through loud and clear. You are a very passionate writer Killer and obviously have a passionate soul. I like that you are always true to yourself whether you are happy or sad... Well done!
Is this one of your first ones?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Killer

7 Years Ago

Yes
Great effort.
You can make it more interesting by fixing the matters suggested by other writers.

Posted 7 Years Ago


*shiver* Not my kind of writing. Its a bit much, don't you think, love? Talk to me about it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was very haunting. The last line of the first stanza was definately my favourite as it had so many unsaid connotations. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is close to one of my poems that i wrote, i like this poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


I agree with SoulofManyFaces on you are missing something at the end to leave the reader with a chill in their blood otherwise this poem is very good keep writing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

In the second stanza: Hiding on a conor...conor is
spelled wrong, and should be corner.

The poem is pretty good, emotional, but the last
line seems to be off, something seems to be missing...read
the poem aloud, that's what I do with my own poems at times.
Maybe, it will come to you that way.

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like short poems for though they have less words but they still manage to spell the magic on readers...Apart from some spelling mistakes this one is really good!! with such a few words you were quite successful in pouring out your heart... good write :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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