Ethere/Ethere-

playing with form

Example of Etheree:

 

Eyes

blurry

shooting pain

mouth dry,  nose bleed,

bad sweat, all wet, chills

ears hurt, stomach cramps, diarrhea

tooth ache, body sores, migraine, lice

hallucinations,  burning fever

Take two aspirin - call me when you’re dead

 

(having a little fun with the form)

 

Example of a Double Ethere:

 

Storm

Wind, rain

Lightning blast

Thunder power

Nature’s wrath, war path

Clouds in flight; clash and flash

Cold and damp, wet and weary

Sounds of fury, lost in winter

No need to hold me, drowning slowly

Tidal wave, water grave, it won’t behave

 

Swirling, bubbling, boiling, destroying

Murderous bent merciless intent

Hell bound, heaven sent, pagans wake

Death hound, vicious sound, fire lake

Gathering smoke, no hope

Brimstone smell, farewell

Lamentation

Negation

The last

Storm

 

 

I centered this poem to give it a swirling effect- I used rhyme and a few other effects-mainly the (ing) sound to give it a bubbling and moaning effect. This can be a very versatile foam-not constraining or limiting at all – have fun with it….

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

An Etheree consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9,10 syllables. Ehteree�s can also be reversed and written 10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1. (total of 55 syllables). They can be written with more than one verse but invert the second verse, and so on, depending on how many verses that are intended. Double, triple verse poems are called Ethere. This form is meant to focus on one idea or subject.

These 10 lines are usually done in unmetered and unrhymed verse. Rhymes/ meter adds a different flavor to it �so if inclined go for it. I�m a rhyming fool so I can�t help myself 

Reviews

[deeps]

I like this I think it's amazing i love how you have it in that form. I still am laughing from your example above take two aspirin now you're dead. That's to cute.

I really like no need to hold me i am drowning slowly. I appreciate writers that can do other forms
I tried one the other day. I guess I did okay on it. Not really sure. I like this. message well said
and kind of cute as well.

[Gheeneil]

I like the symmetrical effect of the double etheree, Bob. This is but a wok of excellence. Keep it up!

[Katherine Wyatt]

I loved this one.. I have to go try this! The storm here.. wow.. not only is the form amazing but you have given life to the fury of nature! Magnificent!

[Red Raven]

well...i must admit that Ethere is new to me. But the ending part really makes my day. I got up feeling gloomy but thanks Bob!!! I love the swirling part....
Keep writing . You rock!!!

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

Ha! Rocked the form and tickled my sick sense of humor all in one stroke! Well done bro. Really enjoyed.
Punch line hit's home!

Cheers!
GM