Heightened Body

a poem that i wrote when i was rather young.

My third eye is engorged, ripe for your gouging

timeless sight, the horizon is never to rise

to eclipse my faith of polyrhythmic chaos coils

changing the order of a brain mundane

 

A replication of the five senses

has delivered me unto the edge of the ultimate vision

where the extention of my entity

is deboned and demasculated

and the ego-centric atom has evaporated

 

I am free of soil, of cancer, of technology

as I lounge on some amorphic astral plane

where eternal evolution resides

where the psychic eye is the essence of god

 

Heaven is the house of the sixth sense

Author's Note

You may ignore the grammar problems.

Reviews

[The realest]

Wow i so seldom very seldom and i do search for writers that write in similar fashion as me i really can appreciate what you wrote and caught some metaphors maybe a only a few could.

"Heaven is the house of the sixth sense"

Really great finishing line your word play is really unique but flows together really well. I highly look forward to reading more of your work. seem like somebody who can truly understand the rhythm of words.

Keep up the good work for you have a really awsome talent for word play

[James Takeo Panton]

I have read this, and your other poems, and I find them all very moving with few words, but much feeling...the words you choose are very well thought out, and I find you use a very interesting rhyming and meter and structure....


KEEP IT UP!!

[emmajoy]

What a fascinating post.. certainly different from what's termed the 'norm'. Your use of words and phrases is extraordinary. Have read it three times and am sooooo impressed. It seems you have the gift of seeing 'things' with a unique eye, sense... not sure what I mean but, it's there. Will return to read more as soon as I can.

[Michael]

Nothing wrong with the grammar, well from a poetic stand point anyway. You are able to express emotion well. It allows us to wear them like another skin of ourselves. It is all the more amazing you where younger when composed, wise beyond your years.

[Clockwork]

This is amazing. If this is how you wrote when you were rather young I can't image what your work is like today. I liked your rhyme, and alliteration. Your stanzas flowed and had meaning. Very well done.