untitled.

something i never finished.

i murder roses to frighten you.

i eat the thorn and cackle at your bewilderment.

must i embody your sacrilege?

i attack with karma.  i dance with vengeance.

 

do you think your mind lucid?

dire vanity, the terrestrial mirror lies.

enemies swarm to feast on your disintegration.

i weather the holy and prey for your devotion.

 

 

Author's Note

Prey is meant to spelled with an e. I doubt I'll ever complete or revise this. It isn't worth it and I no longer remember why I was writing it.

Reviews

[Michael]

Roses know nothing of pain, even when murdered.
Why endure the pain of thorns, is the cackle worth it all?
It was I that made an idol of you, you own noting for my sacrilege.
Fear not the karma you bring, to dance with you again is worth the cost.

Who among us can judge the nature of our own mind? 'Tis folly to try.
Vanity only lies to those who believe self-told lies with the mirror as accomplace.
Enemies can have what is left of me, it is nothing without you, my idol.
To see you bathed in light is not required, you have my devotion.

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Sorry to answer you in prose but I could not help myself. Your words are inspiring to say the least. They have the feel of belong to an Elizabethan play.

[The realest]

Seems like something is missing though the flow to the poem is on point just seems like it was left unfinished more to be said. Great piece regardless

[Todd Rose]

"I murder roses to frighten you" is perhaps the single best opening line I have ever read . . . it speaks to me on a level that I really can't quite put my finger on. Those six words simply have a type of power to them. I was surprised in your author's note that you said you would never complete this. To me, this poem seems entirely complete as it is. BTW, excellent playlist on your bio page. It's not often you see someone with Swans listed

[Bella Cohen]

"must i embody your sacrilege?
i attack with karma. i dance with vengeance."

Wow. I think it's worth it. :) Seriously, great writing here. I really love the dark, abstract theme and it's awesome. Keep writing, girl!

:D

[Jonathan Ballam]

lovely, dark, abstract and interesting. Does look like it might need tightening in places