Vacancy

I wrote a boardhouse. In no way does that mean a boarded up house.

I am the spiritual vacancy. 

A boardhouse. 

A rush of life,

jovial in display, 

then the Great Depression hits

and I'm vacant again.

Reviews

[Dylan A. Miller]

The first three lines of this are absolutely fantastic! Starting a poem with a heavy line like that..."I am the spiritual vacancy." is genius. It gives the reader almost a warning, of the subject matters intensity. I do have a suggestion though, take it or leave it, its your work. But it might read just a tad bit better if you separated the lines "A boardhouse." and "A rush of life, jovial in display," (which is a wonderful line by the way). I just feel that its an immediate change of emotion, almost manic. Sometimes a blank line in between different moods makes for an easier read. Then again I could be wrong, we all write differently, and that's the beauty of it all.

Xavier

[Joiedevivre]

ha! brilliant! Like a breath, life inhales a smile, exhales in despair.

[Seshat Nidaba]

So true, sadness is like a purging of old issues that no longer seem important. Very psychological and pristine write Sherwin, nice work!

very emotional, we all need output at times. well expressed.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Habitual meaning with a sincerer reflectional of time, well done.