living in your shadow

my stugle to compeat aginst sibling for my perents atention as well as the strugle to fit in as a teen

 

Living in your shadow

 

Trying so hard to be the very best

score the winning touchdown or exceed standards on the test

living in your shadow, it was never enough

I’m proud of you son, how for these words I lust

You cast such a great shadow, i wish i did too

as much as I tried I could never be like you

I was captain of the team because I strived to be best

but my parents didn’t go to the games like the rest

The proudest days of their lives when you left for the war

This just made me want to be like you more

With this drug marijuana I was fucked with one puff

now I settle for standards that were never enough

Its so pathetic to settle for this GED

but who else would make this mistake but me

I used to try so hard though I’ll never succeed

and who is to blame but this drug they call weed

The one thing in my life that can help with the stress

  is the very thing that turned me to the worst from the best

Author's Note

this is the first peace of writine iv ever let annyone read and im eager to know what u think so pleas feel free to exspres your thoughts on it goo or bad coments will be considerd with equal thought

Reviews

[ZoZo's mommy]

I know things are hard sometimes baby but you got through it

[The Flawed]

This is very good, and I think that you have found the right way to express your self.

[Gheeneil]

Rivalry among siblings is always present in every home. The only difference is how it is being taken into account. Constructive competition is not a problem. Other than that creates rift between or among siblings. Emotion plays the most important part, methinks. It could blind one from the beauty of certain situation. Thus, one only looks at things from one particular angle---one, which provides a displeasing sight. Anyway, this is actually a struggle that every one is into. Nice one, Willis!

[Mercury Mirrors]

...dude that hit home...So many people SO close to me have falen out...my own ex-fiance, because of weed. I don't even recognize most of my friends who do it anymore. It turns you into a different person. It impares your judgement too...That's how I ended up getting taken advantage of by my ex in front of a bunch of strange guys & not realizing what I did till later. I'll never forgive myself for that. =[ (sorry for the graphicness but it's truth) It's just s****y stuff. This is well written btw. It flows well & rhymes perfectly. Post more :D.