puzzle piece

an old poem, i updated.

Empty house along the way,
          stop for awhile,
             a feeling of loneliness,
                    a Missing piece in a puzzle

Alone in this dusty old place.

I adore its beauty

       it scratch a hole in my heart

          Until it wounded me wide open,

                                 leaving me totally blind and clueless

                                      of everything around me.

I tried to stay away,

  But I keep coming back

                              For -

                     just one more glance,
                                   just one more moment,
                                                                     and one last touch.

Everything comes is just an illusion I stumble upon.
This was never mine in the first place.
Hoping against time
                          that someday,

      somewhere,

and sometime in the past

                    I'll be able to find
                                     All together your missing pieces
                                    In this messy and crazy puzzle piece.

I wish you were mine,
                             just be mine….

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Rosalind Gale]

For some reason as soon as I read the first line I put a tune to the entire poem and sang it in my head (better that than out loud) It gave the piece a lyrical quality, literally. I love the world this poem created for me, one of longing, of being close yet faraway. Thank you.
-x-

[Rhianne Ney]

Good poem buddy (:

[emman]

Very good :) too emotional

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. Using the puzzle to make your point was amazing. Good flow of thoughts and a very strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Laura Maidah]

aesthetically attractive.

[Kuhr Gred]

what did I think in this poem..?? :) lovely.!!. has your love story flows :) KEEP IT UP
- Kuhr Gred

[Mia]

Friend! You've really done it this time :) this is such a wonderful poem its got so much emotion!! I LOVE it!!!

[Marie]

These two lines are not technically correct grammer, but I love them: "It scratch a hole in my heart/ Until it wounded me wide open..."
That is so unbelievably pathetic, shows so much longing...almost singing...

[SmileBig :)]

I really love this! What a great piece of work! Seriously,this is wonderful and you should be very proud of how well you write poetry :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, I think that this is truly amazing and I'm glad that you shared will all of us! It was a pleasure reading it, since it's beautiful in every line. I also like the picture that you had along with the poem. I also love the flow of the poem, how it fell into different stanzas.
"I wish you were mine,
just be mine...." I love those two lines! I feel like those words are meant for me to tell a guy! xD

Ashley Rivers-- Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[afra]

i think it was amazing ....well done