Darkened Soul

Darkened Soul

A Chapter by Pax
"

a little dark..

"

In my darkest days, I held you beneath my warmth

You indulged me with your feverish hunger

You embraced me with your piercing emotions

You were immune to my changeable disease

I came to a realization that you were my muse

              The best rainbow I received……….

You told me that I was part of your soul

            To me you’re the fuel to my rusty engine,

                                     The energy to my thirsty being,

                         And the light of my darkened soul.



© 2012 Pax


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Mia
This is wonderful! I love the ending!
"The energy to my thirsty being,
And the light of my darken soul."
It is very evident that there is passion in this relationship and it's the kind of passion that just engulfs you. The kind of passion that’s dangerous but you just can't help yourself. Really great write!


Posted 7 Years Ago


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Pax

7 Years Ago

You got it! that was the purpose and the dark side of it. Somewhat a dangerous love affair. Thank yo.. read more
Mia

7 Years Ago

It's such a pleasure!



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Pure talent in word form once again i am knocked off my feet by the intensity. Such a short piece but the space used is done so very artfully..
And the light of my darkened soul, what a deep and satifying ending, the endless darkness tainted by the light of one so close and the intrinsic undersstanding between to people. Wonderfully done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Pax

7 Years Ago

I'm speechless by your praise thank you so much.
My thoughts are this could be Marc Anthony in words scribe to his African Queen.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

7 Years Ago

hmm.great to know that, thanks for sharing your thoughts my friend.
This is dark, but it has a tinge of light to it in a way. The best rainbow I received.....Brilliant Willyam! This is definitely My favorite by you thus far ^_^ It touches my heart in such a strange way.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

7 Years Ago

Yeah, strange in a way because its quite a dangerous love affair. I also like the rainbow metaphor i.. read more
You embue this poem with love and lovliness...and you have found a true inspiration...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Marie, Embue is a new word for me and sounds so great.
Marie

7 Years Ago

I could have said you "have given" this poem love and lovliness, and it would have meant the same.read more
This is good.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Pax

7 Years Ago

Thank you my friend.
Lovely words for One special soul and person!! I like the way you can't be witouth this person it means both have done a good job in this relationship.
Beautiful

E.L.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Pax

7 Years Ago

yeah, they do yet a little dangerous but they did it together because they need each others. thanks .. read more

7 Years Ago

Hmmm interesting ny friend
It's really beautifully forelonged. Is forelonged a word? It is now. Great job man

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pax

7 Years Ago

Thanks my friend.
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Mia
This is wonderful! I love the ending!
"The energy to my thirsty being,
And the light of my darken soul."
It is very evident that there is passion in this relationship and it's the kind of passion that just engulfs you. The kind of passion that’s dangerous but you just can't help yourself. Really great write!


Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Pax

7 Years Ago

You got it! that was the purpose and the dark side of it. Somewhat a dangerous love affair. Thank yo.. read more
Mia

7 Years Ago

It's such a pleasure!
Oooh, I have read it like three times. :)) And I liked it. For me, on the second and third line, I think it should be 'indulged' and 'embraced' and on the last line I think I better prefer it as 'And the light to my darkened soul'. ^^ But whichever way you want it, it still good. Thumbs up for you my friend. :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Geraldine

7 Years Ago

Parang mas maganda lang kasi ang flow kung parang uniform ang tenses. Naku yan kasi ang pinakakalaba.. read more
Pax

7 Years Ago

ganun ba, naka past kasi in the start palang diba..kaya pala..i know something now. mahirap ba silan.. read more
Geraldine

7 Years Ago

haha yeah. :)) oo no. I HATE tenses. :))

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