passerby

passerby

In the real world 

     I am merely a  passerby.

Finding no home to call my own.

I walk the dusty dirty streets

                  So lost and all alone.

Why then should it be this way?

Is this the modern way of life?

   Am I to always suffer loneliness

        A life beset by doubt.

Author's Note

a huge thank you to sir Cole of HP for helping me finished this piece...

photo credits goes to google search

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Adam is right, not necessary to have "just and mere" in the same line...perhaps extreme emphasis exists there....but, this is such a valid idea. We don't really own this life of ours, we just get to borrow it, we don't get to stay, just pass through.
and that can be a lonely feeling---because no one else can really affect the outcome of the visit...only we can make a difference for what time we are here.

nicely expressed piece.

[Pax]

Thank you Sir J... "only we can make a difference for what time we are here." I do am trying to do that, my friend, its a great advice to start with for myself... thanks for the advice, Sir, I change it to be more universal than personal...

[Poetic Beauty]

Living life as a passerby is a lonely state to be in.many people these days are too consumed with their own commons and goings to notice others even their own families.

[Pax]

it is, indeed! Thank you, my friend.

[Tai Ryens]

Gentle thoughts that weigh heavier than the world have befallen on your shoulders, and this poem seems to convey that feeling in such a vivid way. These thoughts, so gentle, so calm, the opposite of intense, yet, they weigh so heavily upon the minds of those that stop and think, for a moment, of the life they live. Very well expressed, as always, friend. Keep it up.

[Pax]

thank you, my friend. The heaviness is bearable at times, yet it wears you down sometimes... I so appreciate your wider views my friend. I am grateful always.

[ms. barrie]

deeply moving write...portraying what has become of us...
in this technological world. amongst others, yet still alone...
human connection, genuine, seems now amiss. very profound...
Coyote Wolf couldn't have said it better. Thank you for sharing.

I enjoy the sincere, profoundly, vivid emotions you convey in your writes.
Thank you for sharing :)

[Pax]

thank you so much, my friend...

despite technologies advancement, sometimes we as humans forgot what it feels what genuine connection is... sigh... its hard to grasp something real with reality's slap here and there are on a daily basis... I appreciate this very much my friend...

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, my friend. very true. if I had a time machine
I'd go back to the 1880's and the 80's. this was a pleasure to read :)

[Pax]

ahh, the brilliance of time machine, if I have one, I'll just go and observed, it will be tempting to change what you've done wrong, but I really don't what to change anything from that event, because i believe in everything happens for a reason, that is why i just want to focus of what's now, even though the past haunts us, but then that's life, we get through with it as part of our growth... i talk to much,lol. thanks again my friend.

[ms. barrie]

I would too...I would of made better decisions...in the 1880's I would
like you said, just observe. very true, one's past helps us grow. My
Grandmother always told us to never look back..just deal with the
present. personally for me, that's easier said than done! and I don't
think you do :)

[Pax]

so true, i wish things were easy to do... but it never is... still we try our best...

[ms. barrie]

that we do :))

[Coyote Poetry]

The world had changed. Phones and people afraid of human contact. I miss the days of long conversation and laughter. I believe time for us to slow down. The poem was written with a honest tone and a lot of truth being described. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Pax]

so much my friend, so much in terms on how we consume too much and how easily relationship works, its has good perks and bad... thank you for sharing such insights, and i am doing it right now, I am taking everything slow or else I'll go insane in running a race I can't win... I am always grateful with your words of encouragement...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are lucky. I need to slow down.

[Michael G.]

This may claim to be you as merely a passerby; but, I never think of you as one who is idle. I always sense you are watching and unafraid of being a voice to question all things unknown or not defined within your mind. Because you question, as you do in this poem/thought, you may feel a certain loneliness. But you aren't. Many of us observe life right there beside you.
You are one many should, and do, respect as a writer and as a person.

[Pax]

I have high respect and regards in your words, mr. G, my really good friend... so thank you so much... for now being too far away and so alone in almost everything, its a struggle... writing is such a refuge to me that i felt i have something rather than nothing... I am truly grateful with your words...

[Sami Khalil]

In the real world, we pass by old and new signs. We taste the bitter and good ole times. We suffer in doubt and rise in hope. We are searching, reaching and discovering as we go by in life all the time. And those left turns or right ones can make huge differences down the line of journey...Excellent dear brother and poet...:).................

[Pax]

sign... you say such beautiful and uplifting views upon life, dear brother and friend... I'm still searching, never giving up on the hope and inspiration I needed to go on and keep going... thank you so much...

[Sami Khalil]

So true. You will get there. You are welcome...:)........................

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, we are just passersby in this world so we should live life to the fullest before we reach our destination. Though facing many troubles and pains, it is still good that we have this faith that gives us hope that the view won't be all the same while we walk along the way.
Keep going.

[Pax]

"keep going" - yes, I will, pretty friend, thank you...

[Adam Whitworth]

Hi Pax. I'm worried by "just" and "mere" in the same line. If just means merely and you're saying "merely a mere passerby", that worries me. I only say this as I see you take your work seriously, and rightly so - it is good stuff :)

[Pax]

thank you, sir Adam. I duly noted that and change it, seems like I put extreme emphasis, like mr. Jacob said... i take both your advice because i want this piece to be more universal that too personal to me, because most of my work are based on personal feelings and experienced. A huge thank you, sir Adam...

[gabrielle]

Happiness is a state of mind; so is loneliness. Glad to see you writing again pax

[Pax]

thanks, Gab, yes still writing here and there pag may time lang, hirap lang minsan di natatapos...read morethanks, Gab, yes still writing here and there pag may time lang, hirap lang minsan di natatapos...
"Happiness is a state of mind; so is loneliness." state of mind lng ba talaga?? without the mind can we still feel these feelings or emotions... well sabi nga sa science, the mind controls every parts of cell and organs in our body... so i guess your right, i think :D salamat ulit Gab...

[gabrielle]

Welcome pax...sabi nga mind over matter but sometimes there are still matters that cannot be explained by science :)

[Pax]

true, science is still much farther away in understanding the things on which we cannot explain.