"The end of Pride"

"The end of Pride"

A Poem by MarkGMelvin

Burning Burning,of wants you'll never have,unfulfilled loneliness,of your own choosing,destruction of peace paid for by vengence,of an unhappy heart,contempt of those around you who are happy,in their own quaints,treetops of air are not enough when silence comes prowling out of the darkness the corners, the devestations, the self brought agonies of untold frightful panic,yes despair is in the air,can you taste it? Eat it until you are full,yet you always remain hungry for more and more and more unsatisfaction.The rat is your friend fiendishly preparing his savours for your end,waiting to taste your despair,oh such a culinary delight,when your eyes are afright,m m yes,the error of your ways are a consuming war of discomfort to your world of easiness,pick the laughs or choose..the tears.I have no ears,my only getting of your mind is your faith or your fear.no! choose me not...Pride

© 2009 MarkGMelvin

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interesting. i like how the rhymes are within the paragraph. you also have a good choice of words and a wide range of vocabulary in this. the imagery is great too. it definitely paints a picture in my mind. nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago

I liked it.
It was very descriptive and nicely written!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Before you turn off my star
I want you to know these words
Love you forever
To not regret it later ....:)
Poem full of broken dreams..Good job .

Posted 10 Years Ago

i like it it says so much keep up the good work

Posted 10 Years Ago

Really interesting and well written, perhaps it would be easier to follow if it was put into a different format.

Burning of wants you'll never have,
unfulfilled loneliness,
of your own choosing,
destruction of peace paid for by vengence,

ETC... just a quick example.

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pride is a dirty enemy, I feeds in us.
This is very well stated!

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on November 2, 2009



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